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Humble and Rum

My hands are bleeding profusely
Obviously, I'm speaking obtusely
Hypothetically and purely imaginatively
Because I don't act so pointlessly

My eyes are watering obstructively
And it's becoming so damn hard to see
Who are still my friends lately
So I'll just sit and cry passively

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  • Lil Mask
    April 9

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    Pleasurable read. Ingenious really; I am so amazed by your skill. This really reminds me a ton of my brother, too. Stupendous write, I'm really enjoying the flavor of your poems! Keep it going, mate!