The same one you love
Makes you hurt
Extinguishing the joy
Felt one moment ago
The same one you love
Makes you wonder
If life was ever blissful
Unlike a moment ago
The same one you love
Makes your heart break
With words from same lips
Giving you ecstatic kisses, moments ago
The same one you love
Makes you realize
The line between love and hurt
Is as thin as a moment ago
What did you think
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very good
sensuous smoothe
with a touch of regret
and remininscing
everyone can relate
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Thank you
Really grateful..
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Heartfelt
Within these walls ...I found the write compelling.
How expressive to use - Moment a go - I would use that wording in the title, excellent.
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Thank you
A good title is really important,thanks for the suggestion. -
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The body of the poem is absolutely Excellent
The truth is I can really relate to this write
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TOUCHING
some times the title doesn't hit until the completion of the poem. Maybe something lik..."LOVE A MOMENT AGO; Starting from
lINE 11...With words from lips that delivered ecstatic kisses just a moment ago. Line 15 between Love and Pain & Line 16...Is as insane as a moment ago (Just another opinion) Nevertheless,i like where the point is going.
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Nice one
Thanks for the comment,love your indepth analysis.I'd work on it further.
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