What say you there?
My fair youngin'
Come forth to me now,
Your breasts deserve a tonguin'.
Let my eyes lay waste to your precious altar.
Allow me full access, I shall not falter.
I will command this vessel, like a captain at the helm.
Your seascape has no limit, I'll conquer this realm.
This raging sea inside me must be released,
For it is a sin to be repressed and tied up on a leash.
Man's natural inclination has no boundary,
And my goal is to obscure this sacred foundry.
Let us share our energy like car jumper cables.
The idea of chastity is nothing but a fable.
Lets entwine and fold ourselves like paper oragami,
And run my lips up and down your geography.
My fingers will graze over your beauty marks like reading braille,
In fully pleasuring you, I can not fail.
So let me end this fantasy and pull down the curtain.
Is there an end to boundary crossing?
I am not certain.
A contest entry
- Satin Sheets by liquidmindforever.
400 points, ended April 10, 24 entries
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Honorable mention
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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AWESOME write here, totally wrotic and it rhymes, I enjoyed reading this creative poem. good luck !
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Not sure what the other judges were talking about, unless you revised, but I like this write! It is full of metaphor and great imagery and has some really great sexual overtones. Good job with this Good Luck
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For an adult write, this didn't have much to it. It felt very awkward, especially with the tone you take up at the beginning. To be honest, it read like a perverted old man talking to a very young girl, and just created a very strange and uncomfortable mood.
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It's great to see an entry into my competition which totally and utterly ignored all the rules and requests! I shall return the compliment and not bother to read your effort. Cheers, matey.
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Some great ideas here..
Nice rhyming, too! -
I love the theme. And the creativity
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umm... this is a little adult for me i'm sorry but please enter a different poem i forgot to mention no adult content, excuse my careless behavior but you have to put in another poem
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I love all of your metaphors in this piece, especially the origami. I've never thought of love-making like that, but you made a very sensuous connection between the two. I also found the line "Your breasts deserve a tonguin'" to be a guilty pleasure; it betrays the raw, exquisite sensation of sex. This is very hot. Bravo!
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I remember reading this and I enjoyed this one very much
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I really liked this one. Loved the imagery and metaphors used. Outstanding piece.
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Dear Poet,
Thank you for entering my contest SATIN SHEETS with your submission UNBOUND.
There were a few nice images within the lines.
I would have preferrred you to use the title
SATIN SHEETS somewhere within the body of the poem and to follow along the line of sensuality.
Hard core sex does not allure me. Erotica needs to be sensual, beautiful, full of poetic innuendo to be a work of art.
Wishing you the best in your writing.
Regards,
Liquid
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Well...
what can I say? It says it all! *embarrassed*
Vocabulary is good that lends to the descriptives.
I would polish the form, however.
Instead of one long solid poem, it would have
more of a poetic delivery if it were in stanzas
and with as little punctuation as possible.
Especially the last 3 lines because the rhyme scheme changed to aba. I would in that sense, separate those last lines.
Although I do not write edgy erotic pieces, my opinion is that first 4 lines are
bending and too casual for the beauty that follows.
Perhaps the humorous category will allow it.
I wish you the best in the contests! Warmly, CookieZeal
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Unbound
That is absoultely beautiful. -
Very sensual and very well done
Passion at its' finest
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Excellent!
I enjoyed this poem very much, It ryhmed very well and had some excellent imagery yet at the same time it let the imagination wander. Kudos to you!
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For the tonic erotic contest, Option 3 #5 inspired me.
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8.-----------------------------------------------nevertheless
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Oh my
I like this mucho Especially this part. "In fully pleasuring you, I can not fail."
Very good rhyming for some dirty pretty I'm glad I read it! 
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LMAO. this is great, with a great flow.
"Let us share our energy like car jumper cables."
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thanks, I am glad you liked it
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