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Sick

I never thought i'd get sick,
     or that it would come so quick.

Feel this deep searing pain
     that drives me insane.

Tears role down my cheeks
     sometimes it last for weeks.

All I can do is take a pill
      but me that pill could kill.

I have to try
     not to live a lie

I wish i never got sick.
     I wish i could make it quit.

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  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    April 7

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    Great stuff!!!

    Thoughtful narrative with a flowing rhyme scheme that makes for compelling read & captivates throughout...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • English.Muffin silver member
    April 5

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    I do love a poem that rhymes, but only if the rhyme is professional so that it doesnt take anything from the poem, and this is a great example, lovely that you can put so much into a short poem, general as well could apply to a number of illnesses in my mind] and the last and first lines do what they should; capture the whole poem. thank you for entering