I still remember the day I met you, a million miles away, a thousand years ago. I was such a different girl.
Angel tell me how I’ve f a l l e n so far, tell me where do [we] go from here? My own silence means that yes, I’m in this alone and I have no one to blame for myself, but I’d take it all to miss up a chance to lose you. ~Forever~ rings bittersweet; how wrong I was to think that immortality meant never dying. Angel tell me what to do and how to erase all those images from my retinas, close the lids on burning eyes, erase your fingerprints from my skin. You put the hopeless in my romance, and I’ve loved you all this time.
[and can we still reclaim our innocence?]
so sick of the way this feels, wishing I could go back to Ana, wipe the tears away with countless workouts, have my breakdowns beside the treadmill instead of in your bed. But I’m beyond purity now so I’ll keep hiding from the mirror and hating myself.
I’m tired of lying :: tired of trying :: tired of telling you I’m fine when I’m not. If we weren’t so desperate for a way out you would never believe me.
I’m tired of dying :: tired of crying :: tired of saying everything’s all right when we both know it’s not, when it feels as wrong to you as it did to me. Four months eighteen days since the last time I cut and [I still think about it every day]. One year three weeks since the first time you t o u c h e d me and [you’re always in my mind] but we both know I’m so much more broken than before my wounds healed over and we planned some new ones for my inner child. The glaze in my eyes and the way I’m learning to disguise my voice is just my newest kind of scar tissue.
You’re just my latest addiction. I swore to God you’d be the last but baby it hurts more than I ever thought you could.
♥
Author notes
It's been a while since I've written, so I'm a bit rusty... feel free to criticize :/
The second paragraph has MCR references. The songs are "Our Lady Of Sorrows" and "Skylines and Turnstiles."
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forever rings bitter sweet, what a line!
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"I’m tired of lying :: tired of trying :: tired of telling you I’m fine when I’m not. If we weren’t so desperate for a way out you would never believe me.
I’m tired of dying :: tired of crying :: tired of saying everything’s all right when we both know it’s not, when it feels as wrong to you as it did to me. Four months eighteen days since the last time I cut and [I still think about it every day]."
wow...brilliant. if this is you rusty...I want to read somethinh of yours thats not. -
you're a bit rusty?! and you wrote this?! wow. then i can't wait to read what you're proud of! (:
you have immense talent, my friend. it shows in this write, definetly. (:
keep writing! -
Title- 4/5
Creativity- 3/5
Use of metaphors, imagery, etc.- 6/10
Overall package- 3/5
Total= 16/25
This was good, but I was hoping
there'd be more imagery tied in
with the emotion you expressed.
You have to be careful of cliche,
it's hard to steer away from it
in DP, but it can be done, just
need a little diversion from
the usual.
lovely piece,
thanks for entering
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so raw! i love it! i think anyone who has been in a relationship can relate to this in some way.. great job!
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Holy shit. This is so amazing. Rusty? Nahh just try excellent.
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