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Incredible(when you touch my heart)

my hands shake
when i touch you
and make no mistake
i know what to do
a light as feather caress
in the right place
between your legs,across your breast
brings pleasure to your face
kissing you softly down your spine
we're almost there
you're so fine
going this slow is almost more then i can bear
you want more?
then let the kisses go farther down
i want your love to pour
and your heart to pound
come feel me
let me feel you
see how we fit?it was meant to be
you know its true
now our heartbeats are one
but we ain't done
let's have some fun
bring up the sun
lets race to paradise
where coming in second is cool
i'll pay the price
i'll be your fool
just to get one more taste
imma take you higher
making love in outer space

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  • haha not what I expected. Really liked it. The flow and the rhyme was amazing. Imagery, perfect. Good Luck!
    Rose