I stood there,
I looked your way
And there she was.
Standing right beside you.
It had only gone four weeks,
But still you stood there,
So proud,
But still so hurt.
I never wanted to hurt you,
I never wanted to cause you pain,
But to save you,
Was the only way.
My words,
I know they hit you hard,
That they cut your heart,
Smashed your dreams
And cut your soul.
One to many words,
But it was all worth it.
It was all worth everything.
I saved you from something so hurtful,
Something so evil and cruel..
Dean..
I saved you from me,
From me.
4/4/09
EDIT:14.6.09
A contest entry
- Sometimes its not because of you by tarcus.
500 points, ended July 23, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I wanna love you (but I don't know how) by fairytalelovestory.
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I've had writers block for many months..and I hate writing, but I just felt like writing about a thought.
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wow! once again you've ended your poem hard and strong. i love it!
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It had only gone four weeks,
Should this be
I had only been gone four weeks?
or perhaps;
It had only been four weeks?
hope it is fixed before judgement day
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That's really sad. What else can I say? A good write.
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this is so errmmm how can I say it well excellent!!
Saved you from me... wow
I didn't see that coming...
writers block??!!! I thought writers block is a bad thing but I don't think it is for you babe.. great work!!!!!
I love the layout of this and the colours with this border.. the swords of fighting ...
excellent -
wow again i can feel the pain!!! u are an AWSOME writer!!!! keep it up!!!!! brava!!!!
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oh how very sad
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kool
kool poem , very clever
wonderful style of writing for the 'modren poems' catogory.
byyyye -
wow this is amazing, i know exactly what you mean, i know how you feel, just wow x
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sad little poem, shows lack of self value but intriguingly recognises his value, by giving him 'another'.
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This piece was very well written but very sad. I'm not going to pick you up on errors because it is obvious to me that you had written this at a time you were feeling so down. From what you have written, it seems you need to have a little more faith in yourself. You certainly tried to do the right thing by putting a barrier between you and him so he wouldn't be hurt, but i sense that that hurt you as well as him. Writers block happens to us all. Just find something that interests you and it should set your words in action. Very good read.
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I saved you from me,
From me. --- such strong words.
This is an amazing poem and i loved every word of it. Fantastic. I loved the feeling in this poem, amazing
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Not a bad piece, clearly expresses the feelings of not being good enough. A few homonym errors though.
One to many words, - should be "too"
Your safe,
Your safe from me, - both these lines should be you're
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