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Visible

Layers and layers of dead skin 
started falling off one night

The comfort of dark colors-

left. I had to step outside.

 

People stopped and stared,

face glowing like the sun-

I smiled and waved.

 

For the first time,

they noticed me.

 

I whispered good-bye to yesterday

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  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    April 17

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    Isn't it funny how no one sees until the horror strikes. If only they could see beyond the flesh to begin with A good piece Kari and deep. Very well done.


  • The Fun House silver member
    April 17

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    Sometimes I wonder if it is better to be invisable or visable. I like to just join the shadows at times, but can be frustrating when you want to be seen and heard and no one wants to take notice. I like the style of this and you portray the feelings very well. Excellent job. Good luck in the contest.


  • maralisa silver member
    April 4

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    a very deep and hunting write it point out a reality that many people go round with there eyes closed in this world good luck in the contestmaralisa


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    April 4
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    This is creepy. I like it very much.