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Greg

There is nothing sadder
than those cds
still wrapped in clear plastic, unopened
on the floor
of the room
where I sit
and I wait
head in hands
and the fan
overhead
and
remember you

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For The Contest- Twilight

borntothepurple

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  • Rowan gold member
    September 16

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    yeah...
    simply said, but love is not, is it? Well done. I felt this.

  • this is a great poem. Nicely done. I loved how you got the emotion across in so few words. Thanks. best of luck.

    Kaycee


  • Kathraina silver member
    April 15

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    Aww, this is so sad.
    I love the simplicity here. Alot of emotion and imagery in so few words. Nicely done.
    Bravo!!!



    ♥ Kate

  • I can feel the emotion through it, which is a real achievement for such a short piece. I like what you've done, and the work packs a punch. The form you've chosen is really good for this piece and I think this piece really works, well done.

  • Oh....

    what a picture you penned here in a short piece that shows sorrow, loss & grief! You can really bring the reader right into a piece with you. This is stark & full of imagery.

  • Simple, and elegant. I love it.

    Thank you for entering

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