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Starvation Crunch

Faces gaunt and hollow cheeked, stomachs bloated and distended,
and ribs standing out in bold relief, a sight  no god intended..
That helpless look in their dull eyes, brought lumps to the throats of many,
their bony  limbs devoid of flesh,  then of food there wasn’t  any.

So when you sit down to a meal, give more than just a thought,
for the plight of the starving orphans,  global politics has wrought.
“Worthy” nations stand  and wait, while luckless thousands meet their fate.
won’t trouble themselves to help, by entering the land of a “sovereign state”

But if one day oil was discovered neath this barren burning sand,
the self righteous force of shock and awe would descend upon this land
Bringing along their oil rigs, planes, and graveyard democracy too
Mcdonalds ,Wallmark, and the remainder of the capitalist crew

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  • ecrivain01
    July 7

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    Unfortunately ...

    you are right about the state of the world today. However, this is only peripherally related to the point of this contest. I agree with what you are saying, but can't give you a trophy here. Good luck elsewhere though.


  • Raining Kisses silver member
    May 10
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    I LOVE THIS
    I tell mykids everyday when they eat or go to school or church whatever, there are some people not fortunate to havethe privelage
    This sums it all up, nn so cleverly penned too
    It can be our grace today, its touched me on a deep level
    thankyou


  • TheDemonEve
    April 18
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    Clever and witty. I would have liked to see more of your raw anger and emotion. It was masked slightly by the pity inspired by the second stanza. But if this poem was expanded it could possibly salvage the second stanza.

    Best of luck and thanks for entering!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    April 18
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    Powerful and thought provoking. Hard hitting poetry that hits the stop

    Thanks for the entry

    Jeff


  • Aajdj
    April 15
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    there are starving people in america to

    look in new orleans

    • judmc
      April 16
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      Aajdj

      Re; "Starvation Crunch" You are dead right see my "Katrina" poem
      ....George......

  • Writing0Freedom
    April 14
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    What prompt is this too? I can't judge untill I know that.


  • Jepardy
    April 9

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    Very deep and emotional in its own way as well. More then anything its something that makes others think, truly think. For that fact alone I love it. Very nice job. Thank you so much for sharing this and for entering it in my contest. Good luck.


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    April 9

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    Good luck in th contest. This is such a wonderful poem you have done. It was wonderfully written. It was a pleasure.


  • azlyn gold member
    April 8
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    How bitterly and sadly true. Your words will stay with me always.


    Az


  • SubKitten
    April 8

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    This piece is very well written. The message comes through loud and clear, in a very descriptive way. Setting up the piece with your first stanza gave it a very "in your face" beginning, almost forcing the reader to see these people in their mind as they read the rest. It's a very interesting touch, I have to admit. The rhyme scheme felt a little sing-song to me, but it didn't really detract from the piece, which is good. Perhaps experimenting with spacing out the rhyme scheme a bit more would give it a more serious feeling? Overall, it's a very interesting social commentary, and a very effective one, as well.

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