All is lost and nought to gain,
The soul search goes on in vain,
Fading like a crescent's wane,
This is the sound of pain.
As I implode I take the blame,
Struggling like a flickering flame,
Darkness on me lays claim,
This is the sound of shame.
Taken apart layer by layer,
Heart is slain; mind the slayer,
Worthless life up for hire,
This is the sound of failure.
I cannot hold out on my own,
So many chances I have blown,
So many mistakes to atone,
This is the sound of being alone.
In this life I played my part,
Led only by my shallow heart,
I never deserved another start,
This is the sound of falling apart.
Silently
I
Scream.
Is it emotive enough?
Comments
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Wow. This is incredible. The imagery is fantastic, and it relates emotion very well. I love the way you used sound, giving silent things a voice, in a manner of speaking. All I could feel while reading this was anguish, disappointment. You wrote this excellently.
While reading, however, I wasn't sure what rhythm fit best. The flow, therefore, while I was reading, felt a little off.
Your emotion (to answer the question above the comment box) was very, VERY good. Thank you very much for sharing.
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