I feel my silk pajamas. Slither down my body. Slithering over my head and for a moment I see nothing but black silk. Feel silk cascading over my body. Whispering across my bare shoulders, kissing along the length of my neck and back. Soft silk tantalizingly tickling my breasts. Silk falling, falling, gently breezing over my warm thighs. As sweet water from a spring; caressing my naked body in cool comfort. Feel the silky water lapping at my legs. Singing a silent seduction to my senses. Silk trickles over my breasts, across my belly and, sweetly, between my thighs. The silk seduction sets in. Silk here and there. Silk all over my body. Your scent, in silk, will take me once again.
Author notes
I wrote this in 1993 (High school) and just came across it recently. I really liked it, so I had to share.
A contest entry
- Your BEST dirty pretty writes here! by perfectsunset.
550 points, ended April 27, 38 entries
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Comments
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you go girl....and....yeah....I'll work on saying something better latter, caught up in the moment right now. And I think I need to buy some new pajamas too....
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Title- 5/5
Creativity- 2/5
Use of metaphors, imagery, etc.- 6/10
Overall package- 3/5
Total mark= 16/25
I liked this, but I felt it could be
better if worked on. There's a lot
of repitition of the words silk, body,
and breasts... therefore cutting creativity
in half, when so much more can be
expressed, but with use of different
words.
But needless to say, this was definitely
a beautiful, sensual dirty pretty- style piece.
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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