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The Sultan’s Maid

Guest of the Sultan as you may have guessed
Made love in the closet to a beautiful maid
Possessed with her beauty he was possessed
Afraid of the Sultan, they both were afraid

Whole was the love that filled his heart’s hole
Sweet was the maid that he found in her suite
Control was her gift and she took control
Petite and demure, that maid was petite

Friar Tuck said he’d burn in the fryer
Fawn of the kingdom as cute as a faun
Higher was he who was not for hire
Drawn to the maid, in his lust he was drawn

In the nick of time he escaped to the inn
Sin was his crime as he loved her in sin

 

 

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Author notes

Guidelines for the Shadow Sonnet can be found here.

The required eight homophones used are:

 made/maid higher/hire
 guessed/guest friar/fryer
 suite/sweet faun/fawn
 hole/whole in/inn

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  • poisonivystar4
    November 2

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    Heehee! I like the symmetry.


  • PerVirtuous
    April 11

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    No, I don't think I'll ever know
    The way to write styles such as thee.
    So, I will sit and sadly sew,
    Be happy like a honey bee.

    Great sonnet. Should do exceptionally well in the contest. A very difficult and interesting way to use the homophones. Standing ovations.


  • penman gold member
    April 9
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    Excellent

    Wow, amazing write. So very creative. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Legend silver member
    April 6

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    Oh no! not you again If i had known i would have skipped this one,(contest that is) as ever you set the bar high enough for the rest just to peep over it
    You know by now my feelings on your work so enough said
    Excellent Good luck in the contest


  • StarEyes
    April 4

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    You always blow my mind when you write like this! Wow!!! This is simply amazing!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    April 4

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    Nicely penned inded. Great use of the Homophones and form. It does have a feel of Aladdin about it, quite magical, but with that naughty twist!
    A good poem.
    Thanks so much for your entry
    Gaylene


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    April 4

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    This is amazing and I would think this form would be quite difficult to have the rhyme and the repeat words! But you always accomplish these things with such seeming ease! Exellent!


  • Cup-a-Joe
    April 4

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    Amera

    In the nick of time he escaped to the inn
    Sin was his crime as he loved her in sin.

    I see your shadow. I love your different styles of poetry. I may never write like this , but I enjoy reading yours.

    Joe


  • Ken-Maverick
    April 4

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    This kinda had a nice Aladdin feel to it,
    wonderful rhythm and flow as always. Very dulce!
    All the best to you in the contest

    Ken


  • Pure Thought silver member
    April 3
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    done as only you can... perfectly.
    Amazed as always at the way you can write any form so well.


  • DesolatELifE
    April 3

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    Oh very nice. Wonderfully written.

    I like this much more than the poem I wrote for this contest.

    I like yours very much indeed!


  • maralisa silver member
    April 3
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    a wonderful write I love this good luck in the contest maralisa


  • Rovingone gold member
    April 3

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    Esxceptoinal, as always. It doesn't matter what sort of poetry you do, you do it best. A story I loved reading and the manner you presented it was delightfully different and fresh.


  • XLadyElinorX
    April 3

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    excellent, excellent, Amera. . .rarely do I find a shadow sonnet I actually like. . .and this one I do, definitely. You are to be commended on your skill and most creative tale.

    ♠ Lady Elinor


  • Daizee silver member
    April 3

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    No one can do this like you can and make it seem so effortless

    Stacy


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    April 3

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    Done as only you can, you rose to the challenge and met it head on. A great Shadow Sonnet with good use of the homophones.

    All the best in the contest.

    Love
    Sue x


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    April 3

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    Haha! Loved this!

    All the best Amera!

    Love,
    Michael.

  • Purrsanthema
    April 3

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    And you can juggle words while standing on your head dancing a ballet. I chickened out of this contest. What a tricky delightful thing you've done: using the homophones to open and close each line. Best of luck in the contest!


  • darkyinsoul
    April 3
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    Wow this is relly good excellent use of words. Loved it all.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    April 3

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    I think I better stop and give a "Hi!"
    And say you've set the barrier quite high
    Now I must settle down and start to write
    I only hope that I can do it right
    Your meter and your rhyme are always sweet
    And shadowing is ever in your suite
    So just for now I'll watch you at your peak
    By telescope to get a better peek


    A shadow cast in your signature caesura-ed measure, and a wonderful use of the homophones.

    Great stuff

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