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Dirt Road King ( For Elvis fans )

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I took a long road trip a few years ago,

Just exploring old Route sixty-six,

When I passed through a sleepy town

Somewhere way back in the sticks.

 

I stopped at a run-down filling station.
With a run-down old man sitting inside.
He gave me a wave and yelled out to me,
“Hey, man!  Now that is a beautiful ride.”

He was admiring my classic Cadillac,
A bright white, 1960 Coupe De Ville.
He said, “I used to have one just like her.
Drivin’ that beauty was one hell of a thrill.”

I had nowhere to go and plenty of time
And the old man’s smile had taken me in
So I said, “Tell you what, lock up for a while
And you and I will take her out for a spin.”

“Hot damn!” he said. “Don’t mind if I do!”
He ran back to the shop and locked the door.
I dusted the seat and said, “Your chariot, sir."
He said, "Alright! Let’s hear that baby roar.”

We left a cloud of dust at that old station
And headed out due south on Route 66.
My new friend and I barreling along
To obey the old song and get some kicks.

A scraggly beard covered most of his face,
But I just had to love the crazy, old guy.
There was something in the way he laughed
And the mischievous twinkle in his eye.

His mind seemed to drift back to the past
To when he was young and the car was new.
I got a tape out of the glove compartment
And said, “Here - I've got something for you.”

It was an old Elvis tape, one of his best.
The old man looked oddly surprised.
And as If You Could See Me Now played,
I noticed tears starting to well in his eyes.

If you could see me now,

The one who said that he would rather roam;

The one who said he'd rather be alone.
If you could only see me now.

A long time passed as we drove along.
We didn’t talk much or feel the need.
He said, “This really means a lot to me.
I hope you’re rewarded for your good deed.”

We drove for miles along the winding highway. 

The tape ended and returned to the start.
If you could see me now came on again.
And I noticed again how it tugged at his heart.

If you could hear me now,

Singin' somewhere in the lonely night;

Dreaming of the arms that held me tight.
If you could only hear me now.

Finally, I said, “Is something bothering you?
Is there something you’d like to talk about?
I know I’m a stranger but I’ve found it helps
If you talk to someone and just let it out.”

The old man pulled the car onto the shoulder.
The evening stars were beginning to shine.
He said, “I’ve kept a secret for many years.

There’s so much sadness in this heart of mine.”

"But maybe it’s time that I shared my secret.
My health is failing.  I could go any day.
We seem to have a lot in common, you and I,
This road, this old car, the music you play.”

He said, “You see, that’s my music on your radio.”
I said, “I know what you mean. It’s my music, too.”
He smiled and said, “No, son, you don’t understand.
I recorded that song back in seventy-two.”

Oblivious, I said, "Really?  Were you in a band?"
He laughed and his upper lip came up on one side.
“You’re not listenin’, man,” he said. “. . . I’m Elvis.”
Then he laughed even harder as my eyes opened wide.

“It’s hard to see me under these whiskers,” he said.
“My hair is gray now and a lot thinner on top.
But I wouldn’t have been able to stay lost too long
Without hiding my face and that big ol’ black mop.”

I said, “Sorry but this is just too hard to believe
Though you do look like Elvis would at seventy-five.
The only reason I’m even accepting the possibility
Is because so many people think he’s still alive.”

He said, “Well, they’re right. It’s all true, I'm afraid.
I was in a lot of trouble and had to start a new life.

I had nothing left to give so I just started over.

I went back to my roots. I even took a new wife.” 

 

She knew my secret and took it with her to the grave.
I haven’t had much to live for since she passed on.
So you’re looking at a man with nothing left to lose.
Life falls away like Autumn leaves till everything's gone."

Eventually, I stopped caring about who he really was

And just felt compassion for the poor, crazy old guy.
I decided to surrender to this strange experience

And let him keep talking until the words ran dry.

I was amazed at how much he knew about Elvis,
As if he'd studied his life to the smallest detail.
It didn't matter to me if he was Elvis or not.
I sat completely enthralled as he spun his tale.

 

He spoke of how hollow fame and fortune can be.

He spoke of love, heartache and shattered dreams.

His old life had gone from heaven to hell over time.

He said, "Being rich and famous ain't all it seems."


Whoever he was, he seemed to need my help

Or for someone to listen to him in his final days.
He was sure he was going to die at any minute.
He said, "Only God's love never dies or decays."

He looked and sounded so much like Elvis,
I could even see why he believed it himself.
It was easy to imagine him belting "Hounddog"
Before he became this wizened, old elf.

Hours passed before we went back to the station.
I never really believed him but I never said so.
If I could have cured his madness, I wouldn't have.
If being Elvis made him happy, who was I to say no?

He made me swear to never reveal that I saw him,

And if I did, at least to never tell anyone where

Because he didn't know how much time he had left
Before he went to what he called "The Big Up There."

He got out of the car and said, "Hold on a second."
He went inside and came out with an old paper bag.
He said, "This is to thank you for listening so well.
I sure went on. I hope I wasn't too much of a drag."

I said, "Are you kidding? Man, I got to meet Elvis!
And you chose me to tell your biggest secret to!
I just hope you know how much you're missed.
Millions of people would still love to meet you."

This seemed to make him happy for a moment.
He looked down the road as if wanting to return.
Then, just as fast, he snapped back to reality
And said, "Man, it's true - some fool's never learn."

His act sure was convincing, if that's what it was.
I really started feeling like I was with "the King."
So I said, "I hope you don't mind me asking but
Would you mind - I mean, could you . . . sing?"

He smiled and said, "For you, man? Sure I will."
He walked under a lamp and slowly inhaled,
Then sang Love Me Tender softly and sweetly.
And old as he was, his voice never failed.

 

Love me tender

Love me sweet

Never let me go 

You have made my life complete

And I love you so 

 

He looked up at the night sky as he sang
As if serenading someone waiting up there,
In his voice, I heard joy but also sadness,
A deep passion for life, but also despair.

 

Love me tender

Love me true

All my dreams, fulfill

For my darling, I love you

And I always will


When he finished, I put my arm around him.
We both stood silently, staring up at the moon.
He said, "I miss my wife so much, and my mama.
I hope I get to see her sweet face again soon."

No longer caring what the truth was, I said,

"Can you feel them smiling down on us? I can."
And finally, he broke into tears and we hugged.
The wandering kid and the sad, lonely old man.

 

He wiped his eyes and said, "You should get goin'.

You're young and there's a lot of highway out there.

I wish I was your age again so I could join you
But I've lived long enough. I've had my share."

We walked back to my car and he opened the door.
He said, "I need you to do me one last favor, y'hear?"
"Anything, Elvis," I said, "Just name it, my friend."
He said, "Don't look in that bag for at least a year."

At this point, nothing shocked me much anymore.

His Elvis act, or delusion, was so darn complete.
"And no matter where you go, remember," he said,
"I'm always beside you, right here in this seat."

"I'll remember, Elvis," I said. "You have my word."
Then he shook my hand and I drove into the dawn.
I watched him get smaller in my rear view mirror.
He waved one last time and then he was gone.

I would often talk to Elvis, or whoever he was,
As I drove that Cadillac under the same moon.
And I kept my promise and didn't open the bag,

Though I decided he was just an amazing, old loon.


I had stuffed the bag into the back of my trunk
To make it easier to resist the urge to peek.
At first it was easy but as the year passed,
That old paper bag took on quite a mystique.

Finally, the day arrived the following summer.
I rescued the old bag and went for a drive.
I didn't want to just open it anywhere.
It had to be somewhere great and alive.

Playing Blue Hawaii, I drove to the beach

And parked on a cliff overlooking the sea.
I looked at the empty seat and smiled,
Imagining the old man sitting there next to me.

 

Then I slowly peeled back the wrinkled paper
And pulled out a white, sequined jumpsuit.
It was an exact replica, complete with tassles!
Crazy or not, his commitment was absolute.

I laughed at the absurdity of the whole situation
And at the seed of doubt still alive in my mind.
Was he Elvis or just some delusional crackpot?
Whatever the case, he really put me in a bind.

I said to his memory, "You got me good, old man.
And whoever you were, I hope you're finally free."
Then, in a pocket, I found a yellowed note that read . . .

 

"I love you and miss you, daddy.

~ Lisa Marie."

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Destiny Fate
    July 20
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    Wow, this story kept chills all over me through out my read.

  • i remember that trip when i was a kid. we always had so much fun. thank you for taking me down memory lane today. i needed that. viyanna rosemarie


  • Jay81
    May 12

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    Wow, what a great story. That was a lot of fun, very creative and descriptive. A bittersweet ending to an awesome poem. Thanks for the obvious effort put into this.
    Jay

  • ocerus
    May 12
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    Hey, can you check out April? It's my best ever! - ocerus

  • ocerus
    May 12

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    Although there are a number of typos and the occasional rhythmic flaw, this is one of the best I've seen here in a very long time. In "The Stand" Stephen King did something similar with Jim Morison.
    The thing I like about your writing is that it is so unaffected and pure. I don't know if you know the difference between a sonnet or Superman but you sure come up with some good ones. Conratulations on another good one!!! (And for making me jealous!!!) - ocerus

  • Ahh the ol' passer-by. Nice poem, quick and painless. good imagery, way to keep it a bit ol fashion too.

  • Superb

    A very fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm, and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.

  • My Favorite Singer/Actor

    you put the biggest smile on my face,as I was reading this,omg! How I wished he was here!
    My heart fluttered as you wrote about his wife and how he missed her! man I think that was the heartbreaker of the story, to even think he is/was alive would have been to good...Thank you for this awesome read...Good luck
    Linda

  • Very long very interesting I love reading it and to see Elvises picture very nice Thank you for sharing.

  • Awesome write...love the closing, finding the note in the pocket...always Elvis! yea...

  • Great!

    As a fan, you brought back memories! Good JOB!

  • wow! quite long...but very entertaining! great writing...you describe everything so vividly...I really enjoyed this piece...thank you for sharing...peace and light always in ALL ways...kp

  • a u r a
    May 12

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    Bravo!

    I am an elvis fan -I simply was enthralled to read this poem-ususally long poems tend to wanderoff from the main subject, but in your case,you held my attention spellbounded-you built up the story very well-you retained the tempo to the last-I think that is extremely commendable-the story with linned with all the facts is almost convincing Great job done here


  • queenie gold member
    April 11

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    i liked elvis, not one of his die hard fans but going back to thise times gives you a great feeling. i loved his movies for they took me away from a dimm reality. but when i see things today, i see i never really knew what dim is. you rocked this from beginning to end.i never stopped reading. i got caught up in the intrigue of whether that was elvis or not. i felt the old man's regrets.i swayed to his voice. this was a very well written story poem and this is one of the things you do well. thanks for posting this.


  • Mademokid
    April 4

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    wow i like this poem alot!

    i like the lines


    "I stopped at a run-down filling station.
    With a run-down old man sitting inside.
    He gave me a wave and yelled out to me,
    “Hey, man! Now that is a beautiful ride.”

    He was admiring my classic Cadillac,
    A bright white, 1960 Coupe De Ville.
    He said, “I used to have one just like her.
    Man, drivin’ her was one hell of a thrill.”

    alot ....

    you are a really good poet and i think you have alot of tallent!

    i cant wait to read some more of your poems =)

  • Amazing.

    I had to read this from the beginning to the end, each verse pulling me to the next. What a story and what an ending. You did good Mark, you really did good.

    • Thanks, CC. Glad you enjoyed it. This one was bouncing around in the attic for a long time. It was good to finally get it written.


  • AusStar silver member
    April 4

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    Mark, i couldn't resist, i couldn't wait until I got home I had to log on and read this, so here i am in a little corner in vegas with tears in my eyes. you have a way of making fictional stories seem so real, like you really experienced them. You are amazing!!! See you Monday (It's just so awesome to be able to say that!!!!!)

    • Bec,

      It's much better that you read it at night in Vegas. It was one of Elvis' favorite places, after all, and he was usually sleeping during the day.

      I recorded most of this poem while driving at night but polished it up late at night while playing an oldies station. I asked Elvis to send me a song if he approved and the very next one was Kentucky Rain. Spooked me a bit, actually. lol

      Glad you enjoyed it! I hope your last day in Vegas is a great one.

      M


  • klassy lassy
    April 4

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    It's profound what lives in us forever.

    For a while, Elvis' pink Cadillac and one of his touring busses was owned by a man who lived in a tiny Oregon coastal town nearby. I never did go take a peek, although I saw the car a couple of times. I wonder if they are still in this area.

    I always loved Elvis' music. What an icon he became! The king is dead. Long live the King! He left us quite a legacy, didn't he?

    Your poem was full of poignancy, Mark, and I enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing. As always, I love your story-telling talents!

    • Karen,

      While researching this poem, I found an old ad for Elvis' 1960 Cadillac Coupe De Ville. It was posted in 2006 and it was only $30,000.00. I might have bought it myself if I had known about it. That's about the average cost for that car fully restored. You'd think it would be at least twice as much just because of the history. Strange. I guess things got scattered after he died before they realized they could make big money with the nostalgia tours. I'd love to see that tour bus, too. I've been planning to take another trip along the Oregon coast. Please let me know the name of that town and maybe I'll have a look around. People in Oregon probably stay put longer than Californians. This is a very transient state.

      Thanks for reading this long poem after doing your taxes. You're a real trooper.

      M

  • For some reason, I read this with Johnny Cash's voice in mind. Through the entire reading of the poem, I had The Man in Black's voice saying/singing the words and carrying the tune. Seems like something he'd write, really.

    It's a nice write, though; a couple lines kinda snagged me the flow a little, but for the most part it went smoothly.

    The King's dead as far as I'm concerned, though.

    • Yeah, I know he is. Wish he wasn't, though. I take it as a compliment that Johnny Cash would write something like this. He was another great one but at least he stayed with us for a while.

      • People die and times change, man. In the case of Elvis, considering all the things he did to his body later on, it really is no surprise that he died. I know it came as a shock to everyone back then, and that many people refuse to believe that he's dead and gone, but hindsight's 20/20.

        As for Cash, he probably should've died long before he actually did, but thankfully, he didn't. He's a lucky one that got even luckier with June Carter.

        I don't think America is as ugly as you think, but maybe that's because I'm younger.

        • Really? People die? lol

          I also know that times change, and not always for the better. You're exactly right about why you don't think America is as ugly as I do. My frame of reference is much wider. The America I grew up in is gone. I feel like I was promised a Ming vase and a toilet was delivered instead. Things have improved in some ways in America - most notably civil rights - but we're at an all-time low in terms of morality, education, honesty, and civility.

  • Holy Shit!

    What a poem! Man, that captures the essence of Elvis completely. The long story reaches an inescapable end and though its a surprise, its one that captures the heart of everyone who loved the man. Great Job Buddy, I can see you've been busy. To complete a masterpiece takes more then just a casual flick on the strings. You've certainly, once again, displayed your excellent story making skills and offered up a enduring piece of poetry!

    • Thanks, Chuck! You're right. This wasn't easy to right, but it sure was fun. I actually recorded most of it as I drove through the desert at night, and finally took the time to finish the story late last night. (Too late). I'm paying for it today. lol I was worried a bit when writing it because the last thing I wanted to do was insult his memory, but I'm one of those people who wishes he and what he represented were still alive. For one thing, the blend of wholesomeness and vivacity that defined the 1950's, before America started getting ugly.

      When the stars who defined that time die, it seems that the chance of America ever returning to such a state of grace dies a little more, too. Celebrities were always human beings with all the vices human beings have always had, but back then, they didn't pollute the world with it. They strove to rise above themselves in their art and redeem mankind. Not anymore. Now the goal is to see how low they can get. (Rap, death metal, reality TV, ultra-violent movies, etc., etc.) They've hit bottom but they're still digging hard. lol I'll take an old Elvis song and a drive through the innocent and timeless desert any day.

      Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed this one, buddy. I hope you're doing well. Talk to you soon.

      Mark

  • Nice job. I rarely read poems this long. This one kept me interested through to the end. My favorite Elvis song is What a Night which was featured in the movie 3000 Miles to Graceland.

    Well done.

    Mike

  • Ankeeta silver member
    April 3

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    wow so emotional..is it true? story poems for me are too long lol but it kept me reading till the end. esp the bag part. but i would still love to read your story love poems. they are so simple and amazing!!

    • Thanks, Kita. Glad you liked this. Your free gift for reading is on its way. lol

      M

      P.S. It may be true. Or not.

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