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Pink Snowfall

Eyes, following the white dancers in the sky
My hand, outstretched, to catch them
Small, light, so innocent fingertips
When they touched the palm, they turned pink
Disgraced from the sky
Onto Earth you shall remain
Until you can create the innocence once more

Eyes, following the white dreams in the night sky

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  • Candyless
    April 3
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    10/10

    I love it. Good simple vocab, nothing too fancy or anything less. Clean grammer, you had me focused without typical errors. Nice background, seems to match the winter feel of this poem. I like it. I really do and i would read more from you. Beautiful piece all together. Keep writing.


    • Reiga
      April 4
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      Thank you for your comment I would love to return to favor! Also I am glad you enjoyed it.


  • Xx Alice xX
    April 3
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    I love snow, and looks like we are going to get more of it next week, and that thrills me.

    • Reiga
      April 4
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      Lucky! We never get snow down here, which is why I can only dream.