In the heat of the Storm
while the rain drop-es on
my face.
The taste of sweet lust
filled in my head. A wet
hard body rub-ed up against
me.
I turned my head and their a man stands
looking at me with his eyes undressing
me.
He slowly put his hands in hair
and rub-ed my head as soft as
a birds sings a songs.
I closed my eyes and took a deep
breath. A slowly and steady hand
want down my arms with the slip
of the rain rolling down my arms.
A voice came from me with a
plea to stop, but a thought of
keep going I'm your's for the taking.
He turned me around and held me close
as the rain felled down on us. His parted
so sweet and slow as the wall of my lust
field down to the ground.
He song the song of lust and love
I couldn't obtain myself. I kissed
him in the rain of passion in the heat of the
storm.
Author notes
when was great passion first showed up
A contest entry
- .:TURN ME ON (make me blush):.(get some points) by Minstrel-Morose.
550 points, ended April 4, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Satin Sheets by liquidmindforever.
400 points, ended April 10, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
rain of passion(in the heat of the storm
Comments
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Dear Poet,
Thank you for entering my contest SATIN SHEETS with your submission: Rain of Passion.
Please note the following misspelled words:
while the rain drop-es on "drops"
my face.
hard body rub-ed up against
me.
I turned my head and their a man stands "there"
and rub-ed my head as soft as
a birds sings a songs. "bird" "song"
A slowly and steady hand "slow" not "slowly"
want down my arms with the slip"went" not "want down"
I'm your's for the taking. " "yours"
He song the song of lust and love "sang"
I couldn't obtain myself. I kissed "contain?"
There are even more than I've listed here.
One can feel your emotion in this poem but it is obliterated by the grammar and spelling.
Best regards,
Liquid -
interesting.....no real comments before judging but good job
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