Children soldiers being sent to kill,
While drug lords sit rich and enjoy life.
The man asked "What can we do?"
A whole race, genocide, and all that's wanted is an apology,
Yet the cause denies that it ever happened.
The man asked "Is there anything we can do?"
Depression strikes the mother of child who's father was killed.
Killed in a war with out the knowledge of the reason why he was sent there.
The man asked "How can we help?"
A baby will be found in a street corner dead and forlorn.
And the mother will be falling from a five story drop due to an inability to accept the deed she will do.
The man asked "Can we prevent this"
You are drowning in your own self pity,
You are allowing it to rape all that you are and kill the man of strength and honour you once were.
You're mind is racing, all you've once known is leaving and you're not helping the situation.
Rage is how you settle things when they don't work for you.
And you just can't let go of what it is you desire dragging you down deeper than you can deal with.
You are quickly stringing the sick tie due to fact that you are sick of being alone.
You are being overcome by the symbiotic drug!
And it is now changing you as you become dependent and desperately you swallow falsely praying that the mindlessness will fill your sad, forsaken, empty, soulless shell.
The man asked "What are you going to do?"
".........I don't care."
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This is a sad write. A lot of bad things are going on and there's not a lot of good people that will step in to help and stop them. Thanks for entering, it's so sad as the guy at the end says he doesn't care, because truly in our hearts, a lot of us don't care.
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i sometimes feel that you just sit down and write, the subjects are awesome, the use of words are good, but it reads more like short stories then a poem, i do loved the subject on this one, a strong message, thank you for entering
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it's a good sentiment, and I agree wholeheartedly, but... poetically speaking, it's kinda blah. there's a little rhythm in the beginning, but that falls apart as the poem goes on. each of the images is a strong one, and I liked all of the ideas in the last stanza, but they weren't– well– poetic.
so it's a great idea, a great statement to make & something I believe in, but as a poem it needs some work.
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thanks man, I dig your take on the poem.
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Sadly we are fast deteriating down a destructive path our glorious leaders are too busy being world statesmen to notice and war is becoming a game we play with other peoples lives for commodities and power ,,life is slowly becomming extinct and we just dont care ..an excellent write poet ..keep up the reminders with hard hitting write like this...
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