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Gazing




Gazing
at a small star
smiling down upon me,
softly lighting the night sky
with hope.


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Author notes

Still having trouble writing, this is not quite there, but I wanted to get something down.

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  • gaze
    April 3

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    I think it is quite there
    Your ink still print the most beautiful thoughts.
    Big kisses Bella Mi


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    April 3
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    May that hope guide your writing...

    M-C

  • Yemassee gold member
    April 2
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    This too reminds me of a Mariza type of poem. Except I guess she's use the moon instead of a star, but the rest, the hope that radiates, I recognize that similarity.

    Just a small star Mi? I'm sorry, but at least it is a star.


    • acqua
      April 2

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      Wanted to write about reaching for a small star or falling star to like catch a wiish or something. I like he moon too, will someow get to another moon piece I hope.
      the star is only small because its special in that sky or else because as I said I am still having trouble writing anything and a small star was in my mind, oh well!
      Thanks, Yem

      • Yemassee gold member
        April 2

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        I see what you mean about the size. But it's quite a bright little star, the poem I mean.


  • Blue-Rose Beauty gold member
    April 2
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    Cool.

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