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Tomorrrow, Ana

        tomorrow Ana i'll start brand new

i'll be strong  driven    and more like you

              food wont tempt me anymore

i'll pass it by and be all that you adore

                    tomorrow ana i'm on my way

i'll be much better than i was today

                            one day i'll step on that scale

i'll smile and thank Ana i did not fail

                                  tomorrow will be the new me

i'll be thin  pure  and fat free

                                            finally everyone will see, who i'm supposed to be

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  • Sailuj
    June 12
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    Well done. Very well done.


  • Le Fille Morte
    April 4

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    I really do love this
    I like how you it up
    and the rhyme scheme

    I think in this line
    "i'll smile and thank Ana i did not fail"
    You should put a comma between Ana and I

    Great job
    I love it


  • individuality gold member
    April 3

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    a good poem, thin and fat they circle each other in daily lives, too much is not good for you but at the same time not enough is also not good for you.