All the mistakes that we make
and the bridges that we've burned
All the risks we never take
and the lessons never learned
Pleas of mercy can be heard
from souls tired of the race
spirits crave a loving word
and some simple acts of grace
Children's hearts are full of doubt
their dreams weakened from the stress
cutting, screaming to get out
and we act like there's no mess
All the love we have to give
and the bridges we could mend
Start new, teach them how to live
or their nightmares will not end
Author notes
Prompt- Edge of Faith
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Comments
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This I like
Working with children and youth, this poem hits me in the stomach and made me shiver. "Some simple acts of grace" Lessons and Nightmares, we each can take from this what we want.
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Such a sad and honest write here.
Love the beginning and ending stanzas.
thank you so much for taking the time to enter.
good luck -
"All the mistakes that we make
and the bridges that we've burned
All the risks we never take
and the lessons never learned"
There is real honesty captured in these lines. Beautiful.
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Great poem... good use of a simple rhyming scheme and pointed message... I like it
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lots of truth and emotion in this
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I think this poem is very well written. Heartfelt emotions expressed in a structure that flows very smoothly. Every line of your poem has something to say. But, for me, personally, every line of the first two stanzas makes a particular impression. Great poem!
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here you go,
it wouldnt let me
edit in the clappies
GBY!
Rend
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I think i am barely learning this,
i love how you have written the pro and cons
of life, all this makes for easy living!!!
this is one exceptional piece !!
with love and blessings
Rend
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Very True
Children turn out as the products of their up bringing. They are twisted by the actions of their family and the treatment they receive. Abuse usually begets abuse.
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Hey ur amazing love ur poems
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It's a mighty bug job that parents have, to make sure that their children grow up to be safe and secure and that means mentally as well as physically. That also includes teachers and anyone charged to rearing a child. Nicely done.
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57 for Write
15 for title
Great Write.
nicely penned, wish you luck
anyway
thanks for entering
Out of 100 You have Achieved 72
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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Children's hearts are full of doubt
their dreams weakened from the stress
cutting, screaming to get out
and we act like there's no mess
sadly this is so true.
a wonderfully written piece,
thanks for entering.
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yes yes yeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeees!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I LOVE IT.
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Beautiful
Good write
. This still goes on today. =[
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We must learn to love ourselves, to hold forgiveness in our hearts and spirits before we could ever mend any bridges.
Let the truth be your guide, for you know that the love of children is given without any conditions, without any prejudice, they love for the sake of loving that which they hold near and dear.
Let not a child sleep a hellish night, hold them close, let them know they are loved and can hold you in trust and you shall see them sleep thier twenty winks as would a babe.
I like it, I like it so! -
this is such a lovely write, and all the love that you penned in it!
Blessings
Rend
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I enjoyed reading this piece. Very nice rhyme scheme that you have, it flowed very nicely with the whole piece. And I like the message of faith you have.
Best of luck and thanks for entering
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wonderful
i enjoyed reading the words you have penned here, nice message, great job, glad i caught this on AP today! -
I love it
great poem , great expression mega words. so cool. -
"Children's hearts are full of doubt
their dreams weakened from the stress
cutting, screaming to get out
and we act like there's no mess
All the love we have to give
and the bridges we could mend
Start new, teach them how to live
or their nightmares will not end"
All of this so so very true. I can see the depth of this the intensity of the writing. Thank you for sharing. -
i like your ending here and the title is great. the second stanza stood out to me most, especially those first two lines....how very true. in a sense we are very much a society on the edge! well said and good luck w/your contest!
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Title: 10/10
Content: 15/20
Originality: 15/20
Emotion: 10/10
Imagery: 10/10
Grammar/Spelling: 10/10
Prompt: 20/20
Total: 90/100
Comments:
I love the poem. It was very truthful and powerful. I also liked the imagery through the poem and the rhyming, but I do have to say, the rhyming in the beginning was a bit cliche. That's all
Is there a certain rhyming pattern you followed or did you just play around with rhyming. I see great potential in this piece and you should come back later and maybe rewrite a few awkward stanzas?
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On the edge of what used to be.
No more a thought but reality.
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lovely poem. sadly the mistakes are perpetuated through the generations,
thanks for the hope...peter
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nicely done
enjoyed this read, you pen your words well, thanks for sharing with us here at AP!
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wow
that is amazing, anya! i love it.
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well done poet
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wow
that is amazing, really you should definitely win.
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Such is the callous world of "Humanity" in which we live/dwell/exist/are imprisoned.
I like how you took simple, often used rhymed wrods, but seem to have formed fresher sentences in which to use them and still express your point sharply.
-cheers
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wonderful! loved each and every line... well done!
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Some very wise words spoken with much eloquence. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.
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Words of wisdom, and taking our time to love can be gathered from this lovely verse in rhyme and flow....Excellent penning!
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wow wow what more can i say
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How sweet and yet still profound, I really enjoyed reading this and thanks for sharing.
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Superb
A simple plea so eloquently made and it makes my heart soar
Such dreams can be possible for the rich and for the poor
To hope such simplicity becomes more natural for everyday
Would change the world and be a debt impossible to repay
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I like this poem, and it would be nice if the lesson was learned. We need to be more of an encouragement to the youth of today and support them, rather than put them down. I am featuring this in "Today's Poem"...
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Awesome
This to the point, searing through all the bs of trying to say what you mean. I love this, and I will continue to read your work
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Would be nice , if later generations -
Took your advice ..
An eloquent poem with delightful
rhyme & flow !!
A pleasure to read - indeed ...
Best wishes ! Friend Easy
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excellent!
This work has an outstanding flow and the content is good as well!
Enjoyed the read.
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Love it!
Strong wording and meaningful story, Keep it up!
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wonderful
how true..you are a wonderful poet...
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I LIKE THIS ONE ALOT
I LIKED THIS ONE A LOT. I CAN SOOO RELATE. : ) -
a very lovely write...
sorry, to be nit picky but you need an apostrophe on Childrens...still a moving piece
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awsome
beutiful and true im going to add as a new favorite poet
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this is awesome, its a powerful plea to share your lives and give the next generation real opportunities to grow the world like it should be and so everybody can have their dreams lovely meter and rhymes too
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Wow, I love this, it is powerful and inspiring, I love the way you've used the rhyme scheme. It is AMAZING and beautifully written!
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I really really like this. I flows really well and almost seems like a song. I really like first stanza, that ones my favorite! You are an amazing writer. Very well done sis. <33
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this is so ture, and it seems like youi have writen this about your opions about things..and childrens nightmares only go if we feel safe. we need the love and care that you talk about this, theres alot of emotion. and i love it, well dont big sis <3
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Excellent
Definitely enjoyed reading this! A work of true art! This made me somewhat think about what I have, want, and don't have.
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Omg this is so true!
Omg! this is so true in life today, word for word is how life is how love and faith are too. This poem was beautiful.... so beautiful it made me cry! Fabulous job Anya I loved it you've already earned my respct in the past, but this one takes the cake! I hope you'll post this where other can read it too.
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This is true Anya. It's a great poem. I actually enjoyed it. Word for word is how life is and how love and faith are too. A lot of people should read this and actually listen to what the words have to say. Promote it in the Featured and shameless areas!!
Dancing Feather
Kayla
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hey, that was really good
keep up the good work
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Wow, Very Great, Your Really Good. Keep Up The Great Work
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Wow Anya, this turned out great! How true your words are, such a shame what this world has come to.
Beautifully flowing too.
Lil
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Beautifully amazing Anya! Well deserved for the wait
I absolutely love it, and it is beautifully stunning! Thankyou for entering my contest, and good luck!
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