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Early Morning

I awake to a sleeping sunrise
And resting upon it's pale, dappled light
I feel my fervor revived, rejuvenated.

I reminisce - night's delicate breath brushed my face,
Cautiously caressed, tickled and tantalised every curve.
Sparked my being in its obscurity.

Now, laying in relaxed rapture,
Entwined with the early morning emanation, I know,
Freedom never felt this phenomenal.

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Prompt: Revival

Something I've been playing with for a while.

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A contest entry

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  • Icarus Lives
    May 16

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    Wow, lovely! I really think this is like thoughts I sometimes get. Maybe it's the sunrise image. The poem is well inspired and it seems to have flowed easily from you.


  • Kari gold member
    April 14

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    wow...the wording in this is incredible...it's very well done
    I liked the ending of this and the talk of freedom..gave me even more goosebumps lol.


  • etoile
    April 13

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    the imagery in this is amazing. I love the ending as well. the mood of this poem is very nice also. I really like it.

    goodluck and thanks for entering


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    April 13

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    Wow how very beautifuil. I just love the whole piece but your second stanza just blew e]me away.
    All the best with this
    Gaylene


  • Sacred Geometry
    April 11

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    when i wake up, its a kind "whysthatbloodyalarmgoingoffionlygottobloodysleep5minsago" kinda feeling. Anyways, great poem. i really lik the grammer


  • Electric Sunrise gold member
    April 10

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    What is it with most of your pieces having a semi-erotic feel to it? Or am i simply reading too much into situations that are semi-appicable to us?

    Great work here, great imagery, and thanks for the entry

    (You got your blasted comment)


  • Jade-
    April 8

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    Very nice.

    Great choice of words. And I love the imagery this brings. It's very...pretty. It brings a smile.

    I wish I could feel like that every morning! lol

    Very nice work.


  • Fire-Fly
    April 8

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    Beautiful

    I have to say this is one of the loveliest poems I've read in a while. It creates a wonderful image and gives one a feeling of energy and optimism just reading the words.

    Excellent language

    I reminisce - night's delicate breath brushed my face,
    Cautiously caressed, tickled and tantalised every curve.

    And a nice flow.

    This was an absolute joy to read. Many thanks for sharing.


  • Edna Sweetlove
    April 8
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    The grammar threw me.


  • Reanna Eryn
    April 6
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    Very utterly beautiful.


  • My Solitude
    April 5

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    Nice, real nice.

    This has got me thinking when was the last time i actually saw sunrise... Its been a long while i realise. Rising with the sun has gotta be nice. Great write...

  • angeldreams
    April 5

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    Wow...
    Amazing write and beautiful words.
    I wish to feel that way too...even if for a single morning.
    My favourite lines were...
    '
    I awake to a sleeping sunrise
    And resting upon it's pale, dappled light'

    Best of luck in the contest
    Thanks for sharing.
    -Swati


  • arafura gold member
    April 4
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    Excellent. I don't think I ever wake up feeling THAT good! Beautifully written, poet!


  • Frodofan silver member
    April 3

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    I think you've really captured morning in these lines. It made me want to go to sleep again so that I could wake up again and feel like this as the sun came in the window... Very nice.

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