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Shattered

You were my Prince Charming, my white knight
Everything was falling apart, and you put me together again
Now I'm torn more than ever; I used to be happy
My heart is a shattered mess that won't heal

What did I do wrong? Am I not good enough?
I'll always love you, but it hurts to think of you
Memories are supposed to fade, but I remember you more
The pain is too much; my tears remain undried

Numbness is the center of my universe now
All my dreams I've had are now my nightmares
No matter what I do, I'll always miss you
Look at me closely: my eyes are empty of emotion

Feels like I'm a hollow tinman with no heart
Your apologies stung like the crack of a whip
I forgive you though; I'm not hateful
You know what I've been through, and now I went through it again

My heart is frozen to the core and that's how it will stay
Forever will I wonder how things could've been
Was hurting me worth it? Don't regret it
My only wish to you is that you find happiness, even it it's not with me....

The secrets I told you I hope you won't tell
I regret listening to my heart since it got me hurt again
My tears dried on my soft pillow, my heart broken
I love you....always and forever...

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  • dutch2lips gold member
    July 9
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    oh so sad, thank you for entering


  • Cyanide Dreams
    July 7

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    i agree with Ivy. This had some very well put together emotions, but I think this could use more imagery. Metaphors and other poetic devices could easily make this a masterpiece. Your emotions are so strong, yet, it seems something is missing. I liked this. Great job, and good luck in the contest.

    Josh


  • rainbows. gold member
    July 7

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    I feel that this could be much better; but I really love all the emotions you have put into this. Thank-you for putting this piece into my contest, and good luck.


  • explain.everything
    June 28
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    been there, still feeling that...i always love poetry i can relate to...this is really good.


  • Maggie Kay
    June 24

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    a really well written hearrt felt piece
    keep it up
    kmp


  • BearWoman gold member
    June 13

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    A very sad and poignant piece. A prose poem in colloquial language, just stating it like it is, and pouring your heart out.

    Thank you for your entry.


  • Salty Hibiscus gold member
    June 11
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    wonderful.


  • BeachBum1
    May 21

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    very intense

    god this one hit a nerve, made me weepy. I really think this is such raw emotion I loved the metaphor of the tin man without a heart. this was very sad thank you for sharing good luck


  • xochocoholicxo
    May 19

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    so amazingly written so true
    but its better to have loved and to have lost than to never have loved at all.
    thanx for entering good luck

    • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
      July 9
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      I'm glad you liked this. I agree; it's better to have loved and to have lost than never loving at all. thanks for the comment!


  • Kathraina silver member
    May 14

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    Wow...stunning!
    There is so much emotion here, and the imagery is fantastic! I felt like I was the one in this tale; my heart hit the floor.
    Wonderful job!


    ♥ Kate


  • The Hardest Goodbye
    May 4

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    I know exactly how you feel. This poem was so full of emotion and it was so raw and real, I am so happy that you entered it in my contest, I just might have to add it to the finalists list. (:

    Amazing.


  • Xx-To-Be-Loved-xX
    April 26
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    this is really emotional and deep, i love it


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    April 18

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    This poem was filled with emotion, every line i read was like.. i am totally lost for words. "Feels like I'm a hollow tinman with no heart
    Your apologies stung like the crack of a whip
    I forgive you though; I'm not hateful
    You know what I've been through, and now I went through it again" now i thank you for entering.


  • Xxnightmare21xx
    April 16

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    Awww, im sorry that your hurting. but you will find the one thats for you. Please be happy. I really liked this poem, it was full of emotion and i loved it.

    Kaycee


  • MysteriousWhisper
    April 14

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    great title. great way to describe how you feel. i understood it well. great job and good luck in the contest!


  • Lorien
    April 12

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    Sigh...
    So sad yet beautiful.
    Loss is a hard thing ,but you make it seem lovely in a dark sort of way.

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