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Exhilaration

they are far reaching
your thoughts
inclining me to believe
in love's mystery;
joy spreads through
miles of contemplation
as does the chrysalis
before its next enchanting stage;
you  touch  me
with reverence-
skillfully like an
artist whose painting
awaits formation
completion

 exhilaration.

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  • Aribeth
    November 17
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    Excellento!

    I especially liked the metaphor at the end very good


  • tombruize
    September 24
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    Beautiful...

    Exhilaration, indeed!! You did well here...

  • NicoleWashington
    August 29
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    beautiful job here, i can't even put into words the exact feelings this made me feel. you have the makings of a true writer


  • Net
    August 18
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    Divine

    This was just divine. So few words - but stunning!


  • awannabepoet
    August 2

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    LadyLavender,

    This is the essence of rhymtic excellence, when the mind does have that which it needs to believe, that which it so desires to be true. Then one can only feel what the mind does see and lady believe you me, this is one artist's painting I would love to see.

    I like it, I like it so!


  • Mr. Alternative
    July 27

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    EXOTIC!

    This is a very diverse piece LL, but that's what I love about it. It flows like waters of a river and sings like a church choir!!! I absolutely adore your technique within this write as well as your choreography of words and word choice! The concept and imagery is even more remarkable! My favorite lines are the last seven,
    "you touch me
    with reverence-
    skillfully like an
    artist whose painting
    awaits formation
    completion
    exhilaration." The beginning is just as exquisite as the end and you hold my eyes all the way through this piece! I truly can see why this is a gold trophy winner! This piece possesses pure poetic excellence!!!


  • Edie gold member
    July 10

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    This actually gave me chills. What a beautiful write. Every single line...I am so happy that I happened upon it.


  • Everwind Rising
    June 28
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    I love the weaving of mental, spiritual and physical imagery. Beautifully done as usual.


  • Nakatrea
    June 25

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    wow.. love how you write!
    The line breaks are perfect and so are your words


    Congrats on the gold.



    Kat


  • shoutaloud
    June 24
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    that was a refreshing poem to read, I must say.


  • blueyez
    June 17
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    simply lovely


  • Net
    June 16
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    Beautiful

    A brilliantly beautiful poem.


  • chael
    May 29

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    First line,

    You got me on the first line. Took me on a beautiful ride, and left me wanting more when it was over......chael  well done


  • Sunkissed xo
    May 8
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    So beautiful!
    Well done on the gold trophy


  • Poison Blood
    April 26
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    Unbearably addictive, I was immediately drawn in and read each line wanting more. Excellent write.


  • Edie gold member
    April 23
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    Soft and minimal… so very deserving of gold. Congratulations! It is much deserved.


  • campanaro silver member
    April 18

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    This was stunning!!!

    I loved this write.
    It was truly lovely and peaceful.
    Thank you for sharing this.
    Best
    Love Peace
    campanaro


  • pixiestix gold member
    April 16

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    I absolutely love what you did here and can feel the depth of this love with its far reaching thoughts, enchantment and the feeling of completion.

    Exhilarating write


  • CaliOkie silver member
    April 5

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    Your words the brushstrokes, your heart the canvas, this is a masterpiece.

    Well done. Good luck.

    Garrison


  • individuality gold member
    April 4

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    ah like an artist, let me get my fingers muddy with the paint of woman and then smile as life twists into love


  • caos-cordura
    April 3

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    Wow to tell the truth this hole thing had me from the beginning and leaves me hanging sometimes then picks me up the next line GOOD WRITE>>>>


  • Doom Fridge
    April 3
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    sweet


  • fjola
    April 2
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    You are so goddamn good.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    April 2

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    astoundingly good

    write with lovely imagery my friend, and i love how you never disappoint when i come to your page it's always something pretty special waiting..


  • pixiestix gold member
    April 2
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    Welcome to Round 2! Will be back to comment

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