I find myself
wrapped in time's silken embrace
Hanging,
an illuminated spectral being.
Suspended by a single thread
Eternity
spreads it bat-like wings.
Luminous,
enveloping everything.
Years like heartbeats flee.
Author notes
Since then – 'tis Centuries – and yet
Feels shorter than the Day
http://www.kostich.com/fruitbat.JPG
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excellent
Beautiful
Love the imagery in this tanka
Congrats on the gold trophy
Hop on over an see my new one
Hugs
Susan~~~
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is he not the the cutest little bat, there is a childrens book I love called Stella Luna
me in a weirder mode
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the bat like wings brings a dark tinge to the poem i think with a different wing perhaps one signifying something brighter this is gold
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my humble thanksbut he is a fruit bat, a cute purple bat, or perhapsI am going batty
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good write
ah good old eternity...how can we understand time without end....you do a great job here...see you anon,anon,anon....lol...keep groovin
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my humble thanks and a grin
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gr8
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my humble thanks and a grin
and I do love my little fuzzy pink friend, a bit fruitty though
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Awesome Sis...
Less is more...
Flowing narrative with great use of imagery & metaphor & more than deserving of the Gold shiny you are sporting there...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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my humble thanks and a grin my dear friend
my little fruit bat just steels the show, he is so cute, I love bats, well I am a witch!!!
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Congratulations on winning the gold trophy. You surely deserved it with this terrific piece. You have really evoked a lot in a mere 30 words.
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my humble thanks and a grin
the photo stole my heart, there is achildrens book called Luna, it is about a baby fruot bat who got seperated from its mother and a bird rescued it, a great story so when I found this picture I knew something would grow out of it, thanks for reading and commenting, it was just that your piece made me rememebr this one. thanks
Draig
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this is beautiful, I love it
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my humble thanks and a grin!
Luna and I thanks you! am nt sure how a bat says thanks \i think it is an inaudible squeek grin -
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oh hush lol
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Very cute bat! Your words are stupendous!
Great job, my Auntee! Thanks for the share! 
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my humble thanks and a grin
the bat is so cute, there was a children's story about a fruit bat named Luna, that I developed a real soft spot for the little fella, thank you for all your kind support
Auntie
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When I first say the picture, I thought," How beautifully silky are the wings, how soft the fur!" And then your poem compared Eternity to this image -- and Eternit suddenly seems more - - manageable?-- likeable/ -- embraceable... very beautifully written, my dear friend! Lita
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I fell in love with the little guy (girl)
it was your poem Luna , that pushed me in this direction his violet wings, I know it is a strange write, but I am glad you liked it
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I love the way you correlated eternity to a bat.
This is sweetly creative, I love it
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silken embrace....beautiful...!
becca
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ooh, very interesting take on the image, though I wouldn't say silken cocoon if I were you, because this immediately summons a butterfly into the imagination, seems out of touch with the idea of a bat. Never seen anyone compare eternity to to a bat, though...I love that. So much meaning derived from such a simple image.
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my humble thanks
hmm when I started I was thinking od a butterfly, sort of, somehow had an image of a Geisha's bound feet, not sure why that is haunting me, anyway, going to work in cocoon, home sick and feeling kind of weird, hmm must show -
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Hmmm, interested you thought of bound feet...bound by tradition? by etiquette? Geisha's bound feet always make me think about all that I cannot do because of social constraints.
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I know,
I am just lost in Old Japan in my head right now, not sure why, but yes the social mores to most of us are constraining but we forget about how women are still mutilated in Africa and other places, to satisfy mens vanities and need for control, my that sounded a bit harsh I guess must be the cold medicine -
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Harsh but true.
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