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The Waterfall

As I walked along the river bank I soon became aware,
of  a  persistent thunderous roar that rent the peaceful air.
Nature's loud,fateful warning, at the brink of no return,
to ignore it at our peril is something all must learn.

The plunging torrent's weight, with gravity will grow
cascading to impact on the well worn rocks below.
Foaming and undulating,through it's precipitous descent,
this irrepressive raging torrent is on its way hell bent.

The resultant mist and vapour rising from beneath,
brought negative Ions an asthmatic,s breathing treat.
The wind blown wayward droplets sparkling in the sun,
creating natures,awesome rainbow,a sight for anyone.


Round the rocks and boulders,letting nothing bar its path,
undaunted in its purpose, strengthened by its wrath..
On to the briny ocean, to disgorge and  hence replete,
with gravitational persistence, its cycle to complete.


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  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    September 1

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    Very creative and the contrast in the poem is very well portrayed. Thank you so much for entering this contest and I home to read more of your work soon.

    Take care
    Becks


  • Vintage Chiffon
    July 16
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    Wonderful rhyme here and great imagery
    Thanks so much for entering and good luck
    Damien-


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    May 11

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    Wonderful! What a powerful poem here, with a myriad of emotions and excellent imagery! I enjoyed reading this.
    Thanks so much for your entry
    Gaylene


  • ToXiC-AnGeL gold member
    April 29
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    LOVED the imagery in this such a brilliant unique way of describing it


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    April 27
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    beautiful imagery - love the rhyme full of passion for nature.


  • sorries
    April 23

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    waterfalls scare me. The falling water is mesmerizing and makes me want to just go with the flow. The movie Niagra scared me to death with the scenes showing the falls ... and to think people go over it in barrels and stuff.


  • The Poetic Bandits gold member
    April 19

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    Great Reading List Entry!

    Thank you for placing this entry into the reading list your participation is appreciated!


    The Poetic Bandits


  • Crazy9Piano8Freak
    April 19
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    Very good!

    You did very well with describing how the waterfall has this whole journey going down into a splash at the bottom. Wonderful job!


  • SpeakLove93
    April 18

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    Lovely

    This is a lovely piece. You have such beautiful imagery. I love the lines "Foaming and undulating,through it's precipitous descent,
    this irrepressive raging torrent is on its way hell bent." Very nicely done and thank you for entering!

  • Jocelyn Davis
    April 18

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    The rhyme and meter flow nicely for the most part, and your description is good. But the distinctive thing about this poem to me is the contrast it drew in my mind between two very different mental reactions to the same sound. The sound of a waterfall can create awe and an anticipation of beauty to someone who is approaching it from the bank nearby. But the same sound can create terror to someone who is approaching it on the river above the falls.

    Very nice work. Thank you for entering.


  • Fire-Fly
    April 18

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    nice poem, i like the structure, the flow seemed a little ragged in places but the overall feel outweighed that.

    Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest.


  • ronnica
    April 16

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    Niagra falls came into my mind, and I can well imagine the roar and feeling of danger. ( never seen one quite like that myself,) Very good in expression and flow


  • Haiku-bless-you gold member
    April 10
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    This is a grand topical poem which explores waterfall with the senses(hearing, seeing, feeling, touching and and I assume tasting/smelling of the mist that rises from it). Very well written poem with good rhyme and flow. Write on my friend!

    Brother Dennis


  • SubKitten
    April 8
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    The image you created with this was very beautiful. The descriptions were unique and well written, and the piece overall was amazing! The rhyme scheme was well done; it wasn't sing-song, which can sometimes be hard to avoid with aabbcc. On a whole, this is a very strong, descriptive piece, and it creates a very strong image for the reader.

  • Kalamina
    April 7

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    your descriptions were very detailed in description of the scene. brought a clear image to my mind, great write!


  • LittleMoon silver member
    April 7

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    I have never been near a large waterfall but reading this helps me 'feel' the power and the thunderous roar, mist, the whole thing. A lovely write and a pleasure to read. Sheila


  • azure85 gold member
    April 6

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    Lots of images flow throughout your poem, and the forces of nature at work are described very well. Good luck to you in the contest.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    April 5
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    Oh what a lovely write!
    So splendid rich in
    imagery

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • Aajdj
    April 3
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    nice write

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