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Take a Walk In My Shoes

When people take a look at me

It is the inside of me that they don’t see.

I put on a smile but they just grin

I put down my head

They lift up their chin.

The things I hear don’t hurt my ears

The things you say don’t ruin my day.

Because rumors are rumors no matter which way.

Yes I am black and my heart is bigger

But please don’t judge me because I’m a nigger.

 

You just cant stop

You just cant quit

You’re like a stabbing knife and you’re good at it.

 

Jumping to conclusions because I am black,

Your catch phrase ‘Blacks are whack’

You nag me but I say nothing back.

I cant go anywhere w/o people staring at me

They look intensely so I stare at my feet.

They told me they give me dirty looks.

Those dirty looks up and down

They really meant dirty ‘cause my skin is brown.

 

They just cant stop

They just cant quit

They’re trying to pull me down and they’re good at it.

 

They do not live a day in everyone’s shoes  

The life we live we neither do choose.

What I cannot explain is the pain they bring me rushing through my veins.

They think they own us like dogs; were on chains.

Do you know what I feel

The pain I do is real.

Don’t judge a book by its cover; read the text

If you judge me your turn is next.

   

 

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  • poet-inside-out
    September 12
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    ok so to everyone that thought this poem was about me, it isnt. i was just writing for an english class and it came to the top of my head. but thanks for all the feedback anyway.


  • amberrr.
    July 11

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    Very Well Wrote.

    This is good, how you show the difference between blacks and whites, you are a very stong women and should be reconized for that, no matter what skin color everyone should get treated the same, i understand what your going for. Don't let them take you down stay strong i'm sure you'll do fine. Thanks for having me read this it is really "eye opening".

    Keep writing, i'll hope someday i'll see your writings again. Thank you.

    XD.XD.XD.XD.XD smiless. love;;--amber.


  • JustDavey
    April 6

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    well done. keep up the good work. all in all i like how its penned. i like the last two lines in the poem and i quote "Don’t judge a book by its cover; read the text

    If you judge me your turn is next. ". im a major bookworm so it fits really well

  • OMG! Thats amazing!

    wow, What bitches for judging you... this is amazing. I am amazed at your writing. I hope you keep writing though!

    ~Jenny~

  • lyric?

    it's good! honestly i'm not fond of rhyme, but this is still really good... i have to open my box of "objectionalizm" in order to ignore my displeasure with racial subjects... but that's just me, i personally find all humans of the same adaptive flesh, hell i'm reading a book for my comp class that holds a claim that humanity originates in africa ... lol, well back to the point... it's a really good lyrical peice, i would give it that tag also... if you'd ever consider making a song from it, i'd advise adding a tiny bit more material to the refrain and creating a bridge... but that's just me

  • amazing but can u use nigger in ur english class?


    • poet-inside-out
      November 30
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      yea we can use any words we want to.
      its about how we feel. even though this wasnt about me
      i was taking a walk in someone else's shoes that didn't
      have the abilty to open up. but thanks though.!


  • XxTigerxX
    April 6
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    omg that is soo good


  • Lute
    April 6
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  • Bruce silver member
    April 6
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    I thought it was good. I noticed a couple of typos: cant for can't. You might be interested to read Langston Hughes Essay for English 101 - I think it's called. One of his greatest poems. He was Afro American in college in NYC. If you can't find it I'll find a link.


  • Reanna Eryn
    April 6

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    This is definately an original write, beautiful nonetheless. I love the rhythm, the flow, the rhyme, everything.

  • Wow I relate to this so well, not because of my colour, but because of the way I look... they judge me without giving me a chance, they think I can't hear their snide remarks or see their stares... its painful sometimes, and I really feel this in your poem, I know exactly how you feel.


    • poet-inside-out
      November 30
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      thanks this wasn't about me but i know how you feel.
      people will talk and people will stare but you gotta ignore them
      and give them none of your attention because they don't
      deserve it.

  • Excellent write sweetie, I really enjoyed the imagery that you put into this! A great write to start out your life on allpoetry!


  • Titus gold member
    April 6
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    Is it the quality, the length, the emotion, the agony, or definate feel being in the writers shoes? I'd say, if you present it a little shorter without droning on. If you try to avoid repetition a little, (ignoring the poems that have this form), and that for effect, you need to be able to say,


    "Conclusions are a racial discontentment
    over any I have to face,
    staring down, the eyes of the floor gaze back,
    feeling that I am surrounded by walls,
    that the shoes that I wear need adjusting,
    to kick their guilt trips from them.
    I hasten to say that black is whack if you say so,
    and that the dirty looks reflect my own at them
    making them brown also."

    Making a more positive outlook on things making you seem stronger, can work in real life.


    "Jumping to conclusions because I am black,
    Your catch phrase ‘Blacks are whack’
    You nag me but I say nothing back.
    I cant go anywhere w/o people staring at me
    I look intensely so I stare at my feet.
    They told me they give me dirty looks.
    Those dirty looks up and down
    They really meant dirty ‘cause my skin is brown.

     
     

    • thanks for the pointers. i was waiting for any bit of negative feedback and i finally got it. thank you.!


  • Creed Trees silver member
    April 6

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    Wow this is unbelievable! A truly awesome poem! I'm so glad I actually clicked this to read it. This is amazing! Oh My God! Is it published? You should get this published. This shows so much emotion and tells all readers what racism is truly like. This is the truth and its unbelievable at how amazing this poem is! I'd give you 10 stars if I could on here since AP doesn't have those


  • SuperMickey
    April 6

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    awsome

    this is awsome i love the emotion you have put into this peice i really like it keep it up and write more

  • Riq
    April 3

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    i m brown and i lived in australia for some time and i can say its all true very good write mate

    well said !!! cant wait to read more of ur writes

  • COOL

    very good but remember if some body hate u there are mnay other who love u.great job


  • Fulabeans
    April 3

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    Wow

    Ok...first of all...Awesome rhyme and flow.

    Racism is one of the ugliest things in my opinion. The is nothing about the color of skin that defines us. It is our actions...our feelings, thoughts and emotions that make us who we are.

    If the people you write about took the time to read this poem they'd be forced to dee just how human you are. They would have no choice but to accept that you are an intelligent and complex person full of emotion and abition.

    I love this piece you are brave, and that is wonderful

    great job,
    -Dusty-


  • Doom Fridge
    April 3
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    awesome

  • ON THIS POEM IN TH MIDDLE WHERE IT SAYS I LOOK INTENSELY SO I STARE AT ME FEET. ITS SUPPOSE TO SAY 'THEY LOOK INTENSELY SO I STARE AT MY FEET'.

  • this poem is terrific

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