Shining on the open water
showing everything
uncovering
everything that needs to be uncovered
and shining down on me
You're burning through the clouds
revealing everything
showing
guiding,
leading
and lighting the way
You're burning through the clouds
Clearing the sky
clearing my heart
showing me
I hope
you know
perfect together
we'll burn through the clouds
Author notes
Another quick write, I'm on a role I've only been a member of the sight for two weeks
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- burning through the clouds by JinSays.
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Comments
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your first stanza where you say uncovering everything that need sto be uncovered is being redundant. you've got good form though. you've 2 on this poem giving you a total of 8. thanks for entering and best of luck to you. kahy
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You've penned a splendid entry, thank you.
I welcome you to the site, even if a little late, and Im wishing you all the best.
Love,
Jin
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