The rage that lurks within
That capturer's my soul like a new trend
With each and every breath
The unsavoring taste of death
The internal feelings of hatred and pain
Tattooed to my heart,forever stained
My thoughts now controlled by destructive evil
My soul beyond any retrieval
Forever lost in the dungeon of my heart
My soul now split torn apart
The good no longer visible by sight
The evil now rules day and night
My body now a puppet of life
As I now stand here holding the knife
Slowly dragging it across my wrist
Wrapped around my arm one quick twist
Flowing across my skin then into my veins
My blood now falling like summer rains
Now pooling in the brightest color of red lake
A sudden glimpse of faith,was this a mistake
Author notes
This is how dark and sead I had become in Iraq and I justwanted to share for a loved on gone means dark thoughts!!!
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Though this is dark and painful I'm glad to see
hope in your ending
A sudden glimpse of faith,was this a mistake
hang on to that hope and do not let the darkness cover you.
you are in my thoughts and prayers
thank you for all that you do. -
Good write.... great use of words
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Nice flow.You're good at expressing your dark thoughts.My favorite in here is first stanza.
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Wow, I Can Relate To This Poem And I Love It
'Flowing across my skin then into my veins
My blood now falling like summer rains'
This Is My Fave Part.
Love Always
Erica x
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Maria
I can understand the thoughts,hurt,and pain you must be going through. I hate to see the struggle of such a young person. This is so touching, and inside, it touches my heart so deeply. Thank you for all your days and nights spent protecting us......
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first of all... thank you for all you have done to protect us in this country. y'all dont get thanks enough.
now.. this is very dark, no hope even seeping through along the edges, the kind that hurts my heart and wants to jump in the middle of this scenario and give some hope, letting them know that daylight will come again.
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