Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

~Lovers Death~

Missing image

 

 

 

Only the moon

greets me.

 

 

 

my heart weeps; stuck

in this abyss of loneliness.

 

 

 

Gone are the days of

breathless kisses lovers

gaze.

 

 

 

Darkness calls my name

this unrequited love hidden

deep inside my shame….

 

 

 

Oh foolish heart die a

lovers death let this time

be gone be over with.

 

 

 

 

 

Rend The Veil

Author notes

Picture prompt 1 please give credit     to :http://mmebuterfly.deviantart.com/art/Empty-Dreams-62881647

50 words


10 Poets

30 - 50 Words

35 Minutes

Please be kind and comment, any revision please IM so i can make corrections privately!

Blessings

Rend

 

In a list

A contest entry

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 46 of 46

  • Rick Weston silver member
    September 26

    Edit | Reply
    an emotionally packed plea for the heart to release lost love. well done.


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    June 20

    Edit | Reply
    I can see why you got the gold on this poem
    it is truly beautiful,, much emotion and deep feelings here well done Hun Hugs Angel♥


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    June 16

    Edit | Reply
    Wow. This was incredible and definitely deserving of the gold. Congratulations!!
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • aboomer silver member
    June 16
    Edit | Reply
    wow - great depth and emotion. One can really 'feel' this write. Congrats on the Gold!!!


  • ShelleyA gold member
    June 15

    Edit | Reply
    A beautiful write and presentation. Deep expression of emotion. Sadness and loss of love is palpable in this piece. Good flow and tone. Elegant verse. Well penned. Congratulations on winning Gold. Well deserved.


  • Nom de Plume
    April 23

    Edit | Reply
    captured the prompt wonderfully Rend, thoroughly deserved the golden chalice.. the emotion is raw here, beware a woman scorned huh


  • white stone
    April 20

    Edit | Reply
    Stripped down and lovely. I can't write like this.
    One of my favorite song lyrics is:
    "Dirty your face
    with long and grace
    God given...
    Suffer her heart
    and love her when
    your love goes unrequited"
    -"Rotten Apples" by the Smashing Pumpkins


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 20
      Edit | Reply

      i just listen to the song,

      wow.. ! and neither did I but i knew i had to dig deep, and i have read your poetry
      and I really like your style, thank you so much for commenting

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Cannonsfire
    April 14

    Edit | Reply
    Awww this is lovely Rend, congrats on your gold C


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 20
      Edit | Reply

      thank you Chez,

      for your comment, where are you....I miss you!
      blessings

      R


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    April 11

    Edit | Reply
    Congrats on the gold. Well writ.

    Love is never shameful.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 20
      Edit | Reply

      thank you for your comment

      I am most please , around you i feel so english, go figure,
      probrably all that tea
      thank you again
      R


  • Rose Angel gold member
    April 9

    Edit | Reply
    Rend...choicely chosen words to the picture prompt..Gripping sadness weighs heavy on the readers hearts as you have penned the imagery..and an air of old poetry rings out with the cries from this maidens heart... write luv...M.. Congratulations on your Gold trophy!


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 20
      Edit | Reply

      oh Mom,

      thank you for always encouraging,
      your comments are a treasure


      R


  • thepoetssoul
    April 6

    Edit | Reply
    Beautiful work, love what you have done with this poem.
    Such imagery and feeling poured into your creative piece.
    Truly wonderful, be blessed in all you do.

    Tony


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 6
      Edit | Reply

      Tony, your a treasure

      and i am so thankful for you stopping by to commnet

      Blessings always

      Rend

  • Jake Summers
    April 6
    Edit | Reply
    Very lovely poem. So eloquent.
    Hugs, Jake


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 6
      Edit | Reply

      Jake, I am very blessed to have you

      stop and comment on my write, much appreciated

      Blessings always

      Rend

  • silverfish
    April 6

    Edit | Reply
    this is a wonderfully fragile elegy of the broken heart, and i especially like it that you have the moon on top and the darkeness below, that there remains hope no matter how deep the well of longing. -silverfish

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 6
      Edit | Reply

      I just love your comments

      you are so thoughtful and most encouraging SilverFish,
      thank you for coming by and commenting

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Sandygram
    April 4

    Edit | Reply

    Wonderful Poem

    Well dear niece, you have penned an awesome poem for this picture. Nice imagery to let the reader feel the emotion of the words. Very heartfelt and a pleasure to read. Sad but Beautiful! Take care.

    Blessings To You, Sandy

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 6
      Edit | Reply

      Thank you so much Auntie Sandy

      your encouragement is such a blessing to me, and my muse was sleeping and thanks to Sweet Impatience for the nudge, thank you again for stoping by

      Love and blessings

      Rend


  • ShadowsMidnightRose
    April 3

    Edit | Reply
    This is awesome! I love your use of words and the form and background. It is truly lovely, and the emotions leap off the page.

    Well done and good luck


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 4
      Edit | Reply

      thank you so much

      for stopping by and commenting, your comments mean alot

      Blessings

      R


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    April 3

    Edit | Reply
    the pain of losing a love or perhaps letting one go. Intense emotions can be felt throughout this poem that you've written. emotions that I've felt in the past, and they felt like they were swallowing me whole. You did an outstanding job with this prompt, such a deep pain I felt as I read this. seems to me much more than just for the prompt

    good luck
    kat

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 4
      Edit | Reply

      oh my sweet Impatience

      your comment is a precious Gem. thank you for stopping by
      you are so right and maybe it's perhaps loving and just letting go that is painful

      Blessings

      Rend


  • doolie gold member
    April 2

    Edit | Reply
    Such a sad and heartfelt write, sis. It fits the picture prompt perfectly.

    Wonderful~~~Best of luck in the contest.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 2

      Edit | Reply

      Doolie My sweet sis,

      I am so blessed to have you come by and read

      Blessings and love to you!

      Rend


  • Maxboy gold member
    April 2

    Edit | Reply
    A wonderfully sad tale you have woven for this equally sad prompt sweetie.

    Best wishes in the contest Sis
    Bro


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 2
      Edit | Reply

      Don thank you so much!

      your comments are always welcomed,
      and much apreciated!

      Rend


  • Spiritual Soul
    April 2

    Edit | Reply
    Wonderful write, it goes so well with the prompt. You did an excellent job on this, so short yet it conveys a lot of emotion. Thanks for your comment on my poem
    Good luck in the contest!
    Blessings,
    ~Michaela~


  • Ken-Maverick
    April 2

    Edit | Reply
    Ah yes, those moments we all want gone,
    but they do pass in time, at least in most cases.
    Wonderfully penned Rend,
    Best to you in the contest

    Ken


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 2
      Edit | Reply

      Mr Maverick! you make my heart fly!

      I am so happy!you came by and commented thank you so much,
      I Missed you my dear friend!

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    April 2

    Edit | Reply
    Awesome ..
    I love the thoughts within and how you painted the letting go..
    best wishes and good luck
    Julie


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 2
      Edit | Reply

      your a treasure and your comments

      are a blessings thank you so much

      Blessings

      Rend

  • Rose Angel gold member
    April 2
    Edit | Reply
    Oh, Rend..a perfect take for the prompt..The anguish of she in the picture only enhances your words which have a sad overtone from your own heart, me thinks..You cause us to wonder and to mourn with you some...Skillfully penned, my dear d...Mom


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 2
      Edit | Reply

      My you know....

      thank you for always saying the right things

      Love you mom

      Rend

  • Bob Fox
    April 2

    Edit | Reply

    Rend

    Really seems so perfect for the prompt. But something inside my head tells me that ' The Lovers Death' has a much deeper meaning. As always a thoughtful and excellent piece of poetry.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 2
      Edit | Reply

      Bob how perceptive you are

      my dear friend, old thoughts and memories
      thank you always a pleasure to have you come by

      blessings
      Rend

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    April 1
    Edit | Reply
    A nice take on the prompt best to you in the contest be well.


  • wildfiredreamer
    April 1

    Edit | Reply
    love it sis
    hope you do well in the contest


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 2
      Edit | Reply

      Hello Sis I am blessed

      you came by and read my work!

      love you!

      Blessings

      Rend


  • jazzcat gold member
    April 1

    Edit | Reply
    Very sweet and heartfelt. That's a great opening line, it really sets the tone of the piece and it's just a great visual to start the piece with. You did justice to the picture.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 2
      Edit | Reply

      Dane thank you so much !

      for your comment and you are so thoughtful!

      Blessings

      Rend

1 - 46 of 46