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unite

The future is in our hands now,
We the new generation,
Must remain to unite,
Standing still for our family,
Fight what we must fight,
In order to free our self,
Encouraging us to be an independent,
To handle it all,
So we the new generation must unite

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  • camo.egg.army.gurl
    June 9
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    thank you for entering...good luck


  • liquidmindforever gold member
    May 17

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    RULES`

    Please return tothe rules.
    Take note: YOU've omitted following them by choosing and placing your option in AN'S

    When you've done so IM with title and I'll
    read

    Until then,
    stay

    liquid


  • Shantti
    May 11

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    I agree with cricket jeff. It is a wonderful poem with lots of meaning and it's well written but it is a bit off topic unless your going purely metaphorically pesamistically optomistically for my contest and even then it's not in the specified form(s) requested for my contest either
    Best of luck to you


  • Night Terrors
    May 10

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    that is a really powerful little poem. I like short poems that know how to pack a punch.

    The Positives:

    Great write nice Rhyme and an excellent poem I really enjoyed reading this

    Room For Improvement:
    Nothing I can see you did wonderful



    My Favorite Part:
    Must remain to unite,
    Standing still for our family,
    Fight what we must fight,


    Great job on this I loved it
    Overall:

    I give this an 8/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.

    ~*~Apathetic Poison~*~


  • cricketjeff gold member
    May 10
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    Nice poem, but not really on theme here.

    Jeff


  • blood.stained.tears
    May 9
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    hmmm... different, but i liked it.


  • Amandainlove
    April 28
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    Where is your rhyme scheme?


  • wbiro gold member
    April 21

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    Your piece here is misplaced in this contest for technologically oriented presentations, but I'll give your writing go-over...

    Cloudy piece, not sure what you're getting at- I see references to family and individual independence... but I do detect the spirit of the piece...
    You'd make a good Democrat Party staff writer- they're into slogans, and you have a lot of material here... in fact, I'll suggest it to the next Presidential candidate- "We, the new generation, must unite!" In a logical sense it is undefinable, but it makes for good image...


  • BluesMan gold member
    April 10

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    For some where out there
    a place must be found
    where all can unite
    on a common ground

    To save this Earth
    from a firey end
    we must face reality
    and no longer pretend

    The scars we've created
    we now must mend!


    This was a great write

    Keep penning

    Bill


  • babigurl613
    April 10
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    loved it , evry1 should read this poem it speechs the trueth


  • lyricist
    April 9

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    we the new generation should unite. i like this poem. full of energy. you should expand more on this poem. its too great to leave short.


  • Shuberth
    April 9

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    loved this,, very well written and i like the message behind this, its so true...

    Shuberth


  • AllexisReed
    April 3
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    I think this is beautiful!


  • Jazzlyn
    April 2
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    I like it like this

    "The future is in our hands now,
    We the new generation,
    Must remain to unite,
    Standing still for our family,
    Fight for what we must fight for,
    In order to free ourselves,
    Encouraging us to be independent,
    To handle it all,
    So we, the new generation, must unite!"

    but again it's your choice


  • Antipodi
    April 1

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    The old get old and the young get stronger gunna win cause we're takin over ...the words of Jim echo in your wonderful write poet

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