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The Voices

Missing image
maddening
voices in my head
never remember
what was said
dreaded silence
like the lamb

hidden layers
I cannot trace
torment my past
only blindly recreate

like an indecision
not to reckon with
only to meditate
not emulate

this tormented fear

A contest entry

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  • Fire-Fly
    April 13
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    This is a very interesting poem - one of few lines but incorporating so much depth. A very good read and one I'm very glad to have read.

    Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest.


  • tears.of.silence
    April 12

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    very interesting read here. our inner voices can definitely be maddening. You've done well with this poem. You've put 9 poems into the contest. I will divide the points as equal as possible. You've got a 9 for this poem. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you. Kahy


  • estbelle gold member
    April 3

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    I ditto Rovingone's comment, the torment of hearing your inner voice and not being able to release them, speak then...it's definitely maddening


  • Rovingone gold member
    April 2

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    A tortured feeling runs through this one. As though the poor dear was haunted by words she cannot understand from voices she cannot shew away. Very emotional and touching.


  • Angels Whispers gold member
    April 2
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    Beautiful words and so well penned with much emotion felt by the reader while reading your poem.The past always creeps up on us at some stage in our life. I wish you well with your writing and may your quill never run dry my friend.
    Much love and happiness to you.
    ~Anne~


  • Linaness
    April 2
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    Nice

    I really like this poem =]. I like the use of the single word "maddening" in line 1. Line 15 is a great line too. It's a pretty deep sounding poem. Might I suggest though to possibly use proper punctuation such as capital letters, comma's and full stops where needed. They are used, but not quite enough.
    Other than that, a great poem, and a pleasure to read.

  • Jake Summers
    April 1
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    You did good on the prompt. Very well written. Really like it.
    Jake


  • MichaelSavage gold member
    April 1
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    Oh wow! This is awesome. I love it precious. Great job.
    Hugs, Michael


  • awannabepoet
    April 1

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    Darkness unbound

    Let not the voices lead for they know nothing of the light, those inflections of thought can leave you distraught.

    Let your spirit be your guide for in it resides the wisdom of the eternal light.

    I like it, I like it so!


  • going nowhere
    April 1
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    the past seems to always come back to haunt... well done. thank you for your entry.

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