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#16 suicide note

To whom it may concern

Have you ever experienced pain
so deep inside of you
that no medicine could ever touch it?

Have you ever felt a void
so deep
so empty
that no matter what you did
you knew it would never be filled.

Have you ever taken a breath
and have it catch
turning into burning hot tears.

I admit I am trying to hold on
but each and every day
that I push these demons back
the pain
the misery
the depression
haunts me.

Today, for the last time I think
I have discovered that I have been betrayed
lied to once again
and no matter how much I try
I just can't forgive.

For those of you in this world that I have wronged
or those of you that I feel love for
don't worry
it's not like you could have done anything after all
you do know me.

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  • dutch2lips gold member
    July 25, 2009
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    thank you for entering


  • moaner
    May 21, 2009

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    all very good questions and me and a lot of people could very much relate. well done on a very well penned poem, good luck in the contest x


  • DeathisSweet
    May 21, 2009
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    wow very good this will defenatly help me


  • T-Dizzle Mcnizzle
    May 8, 2009
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    This is amazing...the accusation at the end...just phenomenal.


  • dani girl
    April 19, 2009
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    were you describing me ?

    wow i thought you were describing me my thoughts my feelings sheer amazing ness


  • emoempess
    April 19, 2009

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    very good

    "Have you ever felt a void
    so deep
    so empty
    that no matter what you did
    you knew it would never be filled"
    love this part
    you are a very good and amazing poet
    "the power of darkness"group


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    April 18, 2009
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    this poem was great; i actually enjoyed reading it. (: My favorite part was "Today, for the last time I think
    I have discovered that I have been betrayed
    lied to once again
    and no matter how much I try
    I just can't forgive." to me that was the most powerful part. Very well wrote.

    *perfectly Imperfect&*

    MashellMacabre


  • YOtta
    April 13, 2009

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    I don’t think there’s a soul out there that didnt asked themselves the questions you portrayed;

    from the very beginning I was intrigued and a huge cloud of questions clouded my thoughts, taunting me. I easily connected with your words; your simplicity and originality are heartfelt, and sincere to the extent where I live your sorrow and your journey of life.

    As painful and disappointing as it is, I loved your closure, very solid and convinced yet full of torment.


  • Lady Water
    April 11, 2009
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    Suicide...
    The easy way out, isnt it?
    Anyway, love the poem!

  • andrew houtman silver member
    April 9, 2009

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    I love this. I lost my grandmother to suicide; my mother was carrying me in the eighth month. I never met her, but it still had an effect on me. For anyone who is thinking of it, been there done it and would have never found happiness if it happened.


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    April 5, 2009
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    Wow
    Your emotions just seep from the page, just raw
    You penned this well


  • rsugg
    April 4, 2009

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    The title caught my eye. When I was 16 years old my father told me that he was going to write a letter to whom it may concern and one to my mother then he was going to pull up in our driveway and shoot himself. I thought I had talked him out of it, but 4 days later, I came home and found him dead in our back yard with those two letters by his side.

    Your poem was very raw and heartfelt. or me it was very captivating. I know this was a contest entry and yes, lots of us have felt this way, but suicide is never the answer. It has a ripple effect that damages so many people for years. There is ALWAYS a way out.

    Wishing You Many Blessings,
    Robert

    • loafy
      April 12, 2009
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      Wow, dude. You have my respect.


    • trekkergirl
      April 6, 2009
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      I do agree with you... that many of us have felt this way... It is hard sometimes to find that one reason to keep going. But so far I have done so. I am so sorry for what happened to you when you were younger. Suicide is not an answer to a problem.

      Unlike you I too found my father dead one day. Though his was an accident and not suicide. But I think when you are young the pain of loss is a terrible thing.

      No I am not planning to kill myself. And I would hope to stop anyone I know who had planned it.

      No I know the feelings... pain, sufferring, loneliness, emptiness, and many more.


  • Loveberry
    April 2, 2009

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    wow.... wow, wow, wow!
    a truly touching and emotional piece! it's very sad and generally i don't like to read things like that, but this piece holds a special sort of class and skill and i found it to be an excellent work! great, great job!

  • RechercheCadaver
    April 2, 2009

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    Usuaully, this sort of poetry is too angsty and self indulgent for my taste, but I think this one is beautiful, it's so simple and heartfelt, it flows so freely and genuinely. The last part is especially touching. I can definetly relate to that. What makes me feel happy that I have read this poem is that it is sincere and it travels deep into the heart of things without getting tangled up in language that is too flowery.


  • tigerlily.
    April 2, 2009

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    Wonderful.

    I really like this. Reminds me of some of my own poetry. It;s very straightforward and deep. I really feel where you are coming from.


  • Aajdj
    April 1, 2009
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    VERY TOCHING YOU FOR SURE WILL BE IN THE FINALIST


  • HereComesTheSun
    April 1, 2009

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    this was very subtle and yet in your face about what was going on didnt need a sugar coat was perfect just in black and white, telling you the truth and telling you the consequences, bravo.


  • kryz
    March 31, 2009

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    ok i likethis alot, very emotional and yea lots ofppl feel da way u do. a few spelling errors but other than that great write keep up the good work

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