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Says a Poet to Her Rhymes

Free my verse.
Come break these chains.
Bend the bars back.
Yes, free these hands.
Un-build this wall.
Grant my leave

and bless me as I go.


© amber langham

Author notes

i thought a lot today about free verse. it is not a natural form for me. there's something in my hands that is at times captured by rhyming. i'm not usually sure how to say what i want artfully void of rhyme. so, i offered this prayer up to be set free from the boundaries that i've been working within for so long.

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  • whitecoffee
    May 27

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    great

    the title of this gave me goosebumps from the get go. I think your prayers will be granted (by you)

  • FrostofOblivion
    May 26

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    A true writer for sure! Writing is the best way to vent emotions, being gifted with words is a great blessing in itself. I loved the feel of the poem. Very nicely done!


  • Kendal Palmer gold member
    May 26

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    what a nice little delight this turned out to be!! This was just a great little stanza of poetry...I liked the overall feel and tone of your writing...great job!!! peace an dlight, KP


  • Truetome
    May 15

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    bless your rhymes... ♫ ♪ sing and sing.... Love,

    ps: oh... sorry... so I suppose you don't want to have rhymes... guess i overlooked your author notes... sorry.... Love,

    don't know whate'er I was thinking!

    Love,




  • Treasure 5 gold member
    May 11

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    LOL this is a very good poem. You got me to laugh Thank you. Thank you for sharing and it is a pleasure to read.

  • Dobar Dan
    April 18

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    It Worked

    I am not sure I would want that prayer answered ? - lol - but this poem flows beautifully - there is rhyme within the words - I wrote a poem when I was in school where the rhyme was at the beginning of each line - that was 55 years ago - It worked I thought - lol Bless God - Joe

  • kedoconnor
    April 16

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    well done

    strong sentiment, excellant meter and good economy of words. you summed up your point quickly and that is the task of a good writer. no rambling, no confabulation. well done.
    ui'connabhair


  • Lowell Poe
    April 8

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    Excellent!
    this is your first free verse ...?
    This is very cleaver lass....
    it gives a certain ...breaking out feeling...
    free verse is like jazz....
    but i dint think you need my help...
    you did just beautifully on your own.
    There is freedom in this piece....

    Bless you
    little gypsy,
    Lowell


  • Magnetic Storm
    April 8

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    I too have been loosed

    I have only recently loosed myself from the almost-instinct to rhyme.
    I enjoy this writer's prayer. Funny, I was thinking of writing my own soon.


  • DolceVito gold member
    April 1

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    Super cool...lol, the muse works the opposite for me...Gimme free verse and prose. Nicely done


  • Lolitax3
    April 1

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    This was a great write.

    I enjoyed how the last line was detached from the rest of the poem to signify freedom. And the way you wrote of your constraints was beautiful--I could literally imagine them peeling away, layer by layer.

  • Banana
    April 1

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    If you're interested in free verse I recommend Walt whitman Song of Myself...To me free verse harnesses passion and emboldens the writer


  • theVIP
    March 31

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    I know it is annoying when some one just says "amazing" or "I Iove it". But I don't have anything else to say, so, amazing and I Iove it.

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