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Last Answered Prayer

1
people milling town
casually
ear drums suddenly
vibrate
ground quakes
many fall
stare in disbelief
shock, eyes huge
agony, pain,
fire, luminous light
on the horizon
sky gray as
black somersaulting
smoke filled hands
grip and choke
people scream
HE comes in sky
takes his own
wipes their tears

11
sores infected
ooze pus of sin
loneliness eats
at the flesh
dark drives insane
cries go unheeded
begs useless
they had their
chance
when HE begged
they heard not
when he cried
no tears were wiped
the end is near
they pray for it
the last prayer
HE will ever answer

Author notes

Name is Jake Summers, Favourite Colour is blue, Favourite Numberis 4 and a Random Word is Pancake...so, I'm hungry lol

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  • wandyway
    July 25
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    Yes yes YES, content and imagery are brilliant here

    I loooove ~
    "sky gray as
    black somersaulting
    smoke filled hands
    grip and choke
    people scream
    HE comes in sky
    takes his own
    wipes their tears"
    ~ The contradictions between the agony in the description and the gentleness in the lines
    "HE comes in sky
    takes his own
    wipes their tears"

    Really powerful.

    Thanks again for entering, good luck with this one


  • MemeMassacre
    April 18

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    very interesting i have never heard a poem on this subject as great as this one and i love how you sort of put those people in HIS shoes great work


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    April 16

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    wow awesome sweet lover .. this is awesome with so much meaning Hugs Good Luck in round 2 hugss Angel♥


  • MysteriousWhisper
    April 1

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    i love the poems that are simple yet meaningful. that is exactly what you did. great job and good luck in the contest!


  • frozenblackpetals
    April 1

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    I loved the way there are so few words and so many discriptions. each word had a huge role in the poem and its very fast paced and it packs a punch. great write, thanks for entering!!


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    April 1

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    Great thought provoking write.
    Lol, I meant the answer to those questions i.e. 'Favourite number is 11 etc'. Thanks for the entry!


  • Rose Angel gold member
    March 31
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    Whoops...missed this!

  • Rose Angel gold member
    March 31

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    Prophetic Message For Us All

    Thank you nephew for sounding the alarm for us all.You have put words and effects to that which is coming ahead for so many...Your imagery, and descriptiveness, comes with His voice, and cry for us..Please heed.... write, nephew!


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    March 31

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    this is about the second coming

    very vivid imagery, left me afraid! provokes deep thoughts in ones mind, well done Jake.
    Blessings

    Rend


  • jasminerose
    March 31

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    Riveting emotions expressed in this piece, offering profound thoughts to ponder..
    A powerful entry for this contest and one that should do well...
    My best to you in this contest with this excellent poem!
    Jasminerose

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