In a dream
All my friends are here
The teachers lecture
But, I'm not there
Bells ringing
Everyone hurrying on
No one noticing
That I am gone
Choir practice
A jovial song
Can't no one see,
I don't belong
Recess time
Feet scurrying around
I'm lost forever
Not to be found
End of the day
Darkness falls
A mother at work,
and a heart- wrenching call
Her daughter is dead
She slit her wrists
Had no one seen
Something was amiss?
Author notes
EPILOGUE
A teacher in tears reads this poem
Her students astonished begin to stare
Their eyes rest...
On Sarah Mae's empty chair
Erhh, Thought of adding it to the poem but it dosen't flow well.
No I am not suicidal. I may be slightly depressed but this does not pertain to me. I was just trying to speak out on behalf of the children who struggle through each day as a shadow child. Children who lose themselves. The thing is most of the time no one sees them or even cares. This is in honor of you, you shadow child.
A contest entry
- Children in Verse by sunsunny3235.
575 points, ended June 1, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Tell Me Your Troubles by KatherineAnne.
550 points, ended July 8, 59 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - FAVORITES ONLY [enter your best prewrites] by heaven all alone.
2200 points, ended July 6, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
[:
Comments
1 - 9 of 9
-
No.
-
Amazing! I love everything about this write. The word choice and the essence of this poem. Great job =)
Thank you for entering and goodluck in the contest.
-Kati -
wow, this is very emotional and moving...even though it's not based on a personal experience I think you still touched many with your lovely poem...
you should think about adding the paragraph you have in your AN...not maybe as the first paragraph but as the last one? an instead of ''reads tgis poem'' you could write about a last note the girl left or an article in a newspaper?
take care
Suza
-
this is so sad and heart wrenching. you have captured the lonliness and emptyness a suicidal person would feel. It is sad that sometimes no one notices the quiet and withdrawn people. Even sader is those are usualy the ones screaming inside for help.
huggles
Lena
-
Wow this is deeply emotional and sad. The imagery and flow are just amazing. Its heartbreaking o think how many children feel that way.
-
Great .. ! Nice flow and very emotional. It really puts you in the shoes of those who are shadow children ..! 8_)
-
This is beyond amazing. I don't believe I have a adjective strong enough to express how much I love this poem. It shows such strong emotion and puts the reader in the place of one of these children who struggle each day. Please, keep writing!
-- Tor
-
Wow. It's very deep. Makes ya think...
-
this was amazing,
i feel like it kinda explains my life a bit.
nice write.
Adding your comment:
1 - 9 of 9
