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A piece of Cake

You look so wonderful.

You are a beautiful thing.

Without you, life would be so dull.

Maybe, we should have a fling.

 

Surely, I am in love.

You are the object of my eye.

I want to coo like a dove.

I dred the day we say good by.

 

Of you I always dream.

I cannot leave you alone.

You are part of lifes dream.

My heart about to turn to stone.

 

You are a big crumbly cake.

I should stay on my diet.

As I put you on my plate

My heart starts t become quiet.

Please tell me what you think

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  • glenn shannon silver member
    July 12

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    you cvant have the cake and eat it too but its nice to nibble a little every day untill its all devoured a lovely sweet piece indeed

  • Topnotchsy
    April 14

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    Nice write. I like the dual meaning that is here (is it a relationship with a person, or with cake? Could be either.)

  • SadmanJim
    April 6

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    My love too is like a cake, sweet and creamy
    and when she hugs me tight, I feel oh-so-dreamy.
    Nice!
    should that be "to" instead of "t" is last line?

    Write On!
    jIM

  • patrick20traveler
    April 5
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    Yes, I can sure relate to this one. Delightful.


  • Capt Jed silver member
    April 5

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    You are so correct, it could have a double meaning. At first I thought it to mean a man's love for a woman. I suppose it has a lot to do with the mindset of the reader at the time. It was an enjoyable read nevertheless, thanks for posting.


  • individuality gold member
    April 3

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    ah cake, lol i have one about a cheesecake but it is not psoted as yet - i am a cake lover too, just pass it over and i will devour it - a good poem.

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