Weathered and worn
We shed our outer layers
Tattered and torn
Peeled away by naysayers
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Bloodied flesh of the tree
Cut deep within our wood
Using words that pierce me
With malice so they could
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Wounded and scarred
Layers become leathery rough
Protected heartwood turns hard
Showing we have stood tough
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Hope lives in our leaves of green
Shading us from all that is mean
Author notes
By ~ Maxboy
Background By ~ AmazinJason
Picture Prompt ~ #2 Gum Tree 'Artwork by G T L Thoughts-of-Soloman'
Bronze, HM(2)
In a list
A contest entry
- 4 to 14 lines only by piccola.
1800 points, ended April 12, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I got points...DISH EM OUT BABY!!! by Vintage Chiffon.
1150 points, ended May 12, 58 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ANYTHING YOU WANT....ALMOST by enlightenedatheist.
950 points, ended June 21, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - come take a look! please?? (rhyming contest!) by nobodys-girl.
400 points, ended July 16, 237 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
~PLEASE COMMENT~
Comments
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excellent
Loved the imagery
And the background as well
Can I right click and save on this one
Hugs
Your lil sis
Susan~~~
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I love the pictures you were able to paint with your words. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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"Weathered and worn
We shed our outer layers
Tattered and torn
Peeled away by naysayers"
I loved this pat. stunning imagery.
good luck and thanks for entering.
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Thank you very much for your great comment, I am happy you liked my write.
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great imagry and over all good work
loved the pic
keep it up
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Absolutely stunning imagery. I loved it to death :]
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Lets start off with the background and the picture. The background is amazing, There is some really good texture, and the fossilized leaf, with the bee in the center, is beautifully done. The picture is awe inspiring. I can see where you muse went with this as well!
As far as the poem it'self, this is a wonderfully written write! The imagery, was so well done, I felt as if even if I didn't have the picture there, I still would have seen the tree. The rhythm was perfect. Overall, You did a wonderful job on this! Thankyou for entering my contest, and Good Luck! -
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Thank you so very much for your wonderful and detailed comment, I am pleased you enjoyed my write.
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WONDERFUL! i cant tell you how many people i have had to dq because they would not follow the rules! thank god someone here can read..lol. this was a wonderful piece and I wish you the best of luck!
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Thank you very much for the Honorable Mention, but most of all, I am so happy you liked my write.
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Thank you so much for your wonderful comment, I am pleased you enjoyed my write.
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imagery is strong and i liked it. thanks for sharing.
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This is beautiful, you capture so much in this piece, the images are so beautiful indeed. Best to you in the contest
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so well done
you have captured the story of the picture good descriptive use of words
very easy to read thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck
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Thank you very much for your beautiful comment and applause, I am happy you liked my write.
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Amazing job on this. I would have loved to see the last stanza with 2 more lines but I can deal with it just fine. Thank you very much for your entry in this contest and I wish you the best of luck. Wonderful deep expressions.
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Thank you so much for the Honorable Mention, I am pleased you enjoyed my write.
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You did amazing lots of deep thought I love that.
The Positives:
Lots of imagery and a fasinating poem I really loved what I saw here
Room For Improvement:
Nothing I can see you did wonderful
My Favorite Part:
Bloodied flesh of the tree
Cut deep within our wood
Using words that pierce me
With malice so they could
That was so interesting!!!!! Loved it
Overall:
I give this an 8/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
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I like the thought you put into the poem. But the rhyme was just a tad off. I thank you for entering the contest. Unfortunately you've already won a trophy and therefore are being removed from the contest because this breaks the rules. Thanks. kahy
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Thank you very much for your comment, I am happy you liked my thought here.
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Quite like the idea but some of the rhymes are forced. I can't see anything new here.
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Thank you very much for your comment, I am pleased you liked the idea.
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This is nice and descriptive. Thanks for entering.
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Thank you very much for your great comment, I am happy you liked my write.
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Very nice. I love the idea you used here and you expressed it wonderfully. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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Great piece!
You know i have one of those trees in my back yard.
And when the bark falls off it very very smooth.
You have some great imagery and metaphors in here . And,Thanks for entering i enjoyed the piece.
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I love the border and bg. The words are great too. I find that sometimes it is the lack of words that hurt me the most ... thank you for entering.
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!!! Thank You So Much !!!
For the Bronze Trophy and your wonderful comment, but most of all, I am pleased you enjoyed my write. I am sorry to hear of your leaving AP, I have had a lot of fun with your contests. I will miss you, your wonderful comments and great since of humor. I wish you the best in what ever you do and look forward to your speedy return when it is right for you.
Maxboy
Don
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The title: Certainly most appropriate.
I like the way you've used the tree as an analogy to a human condition, which works very well. Indeed, life isn't always easy in this world but great changes and adaptations can be brought about.
The rhyming isn't too forced, which sits well with me and the last stanza is a great way to finish.
I think you are the only one to use this picture option, much thanks for taking this on and submitting such a wonderful piece.
Sol
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Thank you very much for such a wonderful comment, I am so pleased you enjoyed my write.
Don
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Aww this was so beautifully crafted!
I loved the illustrations you have
portrayed and such amazing
metaphors. Lovely background as
well, and nice font.
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Wow! I liked that surprise ending: "Hope lives in our leaves of green / Shading us from all that is mean" I liked the metaphor of the tree. I enjoyed the rhythm and the flow; I wish it could have lasted longer.
Thank you for your entry.
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Thank you so much for the applause and your wonderful comment. I am pleased you enjoyed my write.
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I love the use of the tree here, hope is something we all need to have in our lives. An excellent write, rhyme and flow are spot on, well penned hunni. Good luck in the contest
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Thank you so much for your wonderful comment girl, I am pleased you enjoyed my write.
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Wonderful Poem
Hi Max, I love the metophor of the tree and life. I think I have felt like this tree more then once oin my like.
Sometimes we need more then a tree to shade us from all he mean out there. Hugs and Smiles Take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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Thank you so much for your comment and support Sandy, I am pleased you liked my write. Yes, sometimes it needs to be much more than a tree to protect us.
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I love this write by you sweetie. It's imagery is wonderful as well as the rhymn. Love your background, too. It works great with your poem.
Beautiful~~~Best of luck in the contest.
Love You,
Laura
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Thank you very much for the wonderful comment sweetie, I am pleased you enjoyed it.
Love You Too
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