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another portrait of no one special


I use your hair
to paint an image
of self enlightenment
and try to see
the beauty you describe
in the contours of my
childish face

but the freckles obstruct
my insight,
scattering across a plane
like constellations
making me as uncertain
as space itself


Author notes

Glass
Wine
Gold
Mirror
Cameo
Portrait



(Unfinished.)

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  • Ryno
    October 10
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    Superb imagery and message.


  • rebel lips
    August 11
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    i really love this


  • Puking Faerie Dust gold member
    April 1

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    Oooooh yes. Definitely worthy of gold, dear. That ending was fantastic. You never disappoint


  • film
    March 31

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    I love this, and I think obstruct is one of the best words in the world. I'm not sure what else to say about this, just that I really really like it. If you do end up adding more, please tell me if you don't mind. I'd love to see what you do.


  • deadcolor dreams
    March 31

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    brilliant

    there were some really strong images on this, I really got sucked into it right away. Your author notes say it's unfinished, so tell me when it IS finished. I'm judging by the end of today.

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