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Rock Bottom

Red rivers
Overrun the oceans
Childlike dreams
Keep hidden

Black skies
Over exposed storms
Thoughts filled with tears
Thoughts filled with fears
Only to find hopeless
Misery

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  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    May 9

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    Been there, done that, emptied the Kleenex box as dozen times. Well written... and a poem we can all identify with.


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    April 11

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    Whoa!

    Sure sounds like rock bottom to me. This is very visual & with powerful metaphor. I can identify. Hope I don't have stormy dreams.


  • Patpowers silver member
    April 4

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    Nice work on this one..very descriptive piece and so moving. Thanks again for sharing this work with us Rev!


  • HaleyMary
    March 31

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    Powerful write. I liked how you began this and how you ended this. It makes me think of how innocent and happy life can seem when people first start living in the world and of how that innocence can be shattered once people see all the suffering that goes on in the world. Thanks for sharing and keep that pen flowing.

    Haley Mary


  • Moonlit-Reveries
    March 31

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    I can relate to this feeling and you capture and I love how you expressed it. I love your last stanza and the line over exposed storms and thoughts filled with tears and thoughts filled with fears.

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