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Sharp Teeth

Shadows
Hang
Across the horizon
Repeatedly
Penetrating the soul


Thoughts decompose
Each moment filled with pain
Escaping reality
Thinking of
Heading to the dentist

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  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    April 19

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    LOL...

    Heading to the DDS is not a way of escaping reality for me! This had a twist I didn't expect. Pain certainly can bring us to our senses can't it?


  • requiempoet gold member
    April 5

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    I didn't even notice that it was an acrostic. Lol so much for being observant. This is sort of metaphorical yes? Though...I hate the dentist. Mean man he is.


  • HaleyMary
    March 31

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    Good acrostic piece. Didn't think it would be about the dentist when I first started reading this. The part of shadows seemed to portray well the feeling of dread people have when they are about to go to the dentist for a check up. Also, the part of thoughts decomposing was good, too. Seemed metaphorical, like thoughts decomposing just like teeth. Thanks for sharing and keep that pen flowing.

    Haley Mary