A tear for a friend who moved far away,
He couldn't pay the rent so they said he could stay.
Tonight a tear will fall for you
And all the things we used to do.
A tear for a father whose love ran out,
Replaced by rage that akes him shout.
A tear will run for you today,
And when you didn't act this way.
A tear for a mother whose moneys running low,
Her smile says " My daughter can't know".
A tear will drop for you tonight,
In hopes that things will be alright.
The last tears for a lonely girl,
Pushing away the rest of the world.
You're her life and tears fall, too,
Whenever she feels like shes losing you.
Author notes
first one is my freind who moved, second my dad, third my mom, and fourth......ME!
A contest entry
- Prewrites Contest by tears.of.silence.
1000 points, ended April 18, 407 entries
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Great work
Really, awsome poem I loved the third stanza.
however second line, second stanza: akes=makes?
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yes...lol. my nickname is the typo queen XD
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really good poem....( i sent you this so you can see my face lol)
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oh wow. this is amazing. that was such an astounding piece, you have raw talent. (: please, never stop writing!
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thank you for such a piece of work
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This is so very sad. I liked the way it flowed and how you just put so much emotion in it. Excellent work. This one deserves a 45 as well. You've got a total of 90. Excellent work. THank you for entering and best of luck to you. kahy
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thanks everyone!!!
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so sorry to hear that life is hurting you so much at the moment. i have been dealing with something along the same lines for awhile. i honestly hope you don't fall and let the pain overcome you.
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I am sorry to hear that life is being tough on you at the moment. It was a simalar family situation when i was your age that began me writing. I hope that you will not only overcome the pain you feel but grow as a writer as well. love and luck,
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Awhs hun, your not loney you have me , Wub you. ANd I hope everything works out with everyone of them poeple! Keep writting.
~ Chelsey ♥
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