Oh how dark and gray the sky has turned in recent days
a dark hoard of black clouds surrounding my heart even my soul.
My eyes they burn with tears that flow from them
I wipe them away yet even more fall.
I reach down to pick up the razor lying on the floor and use it to cut deeply.
Blood flows freely and I... I lie waiting, bleeding, and dying.
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A contest entry
- quickie von doom ♥ by Immortal Obscurity.
850 points, ended March 30, 2009, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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a dark sad deep piece hon...excellent job
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Very dark, depressing and filled with loneliness. An escape from life is only but death. Great write.
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Very great piece, AP Mother!
I really like this one and hope that you do very well in the contest, hon!
Best wishes to you!
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I was reading some of the comments below.....my thoughts are these, -an actor isn't the character that he plays in the movies-it is only his interpretation of this character using a facet of his creative energy to become the written words of the script that he has studied. So it is with the poet as well...We are not the words that we write necessarily but rather the words are another facet of our creative energy expressing itself in different forms. I think you did very well. Of course I am partial to anyone who is a trekky, lol
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I can only trust that this is a contest and not real life. I am very uncomfortable with this poem and, I suppose, I find it distasteful. Sad to say no claps this time
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Oh wow... This is very dark and deep. I hope that it really isn't true. I mean I'm sure it's not true with you... But excellent write all the same. Thanks for sharing. Kahy
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This is very nice, well done
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This is lovely, except for the end-bit, which is a little too stating-the-obvious for my taste. Other than that, a valiant attempt; thanks for entering.
Laura
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NOOO!!!!!!
Oh yeah.. its just a poem.
heh
Nice work.
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