Twinkling beads of dew drops
a vain, smooth, dark color
the expressive, delicate bud balancing
on a lithe, long stalk
thorns a small detraction
from the end result
Slender hand reaching from above~
just brushing the fragile, quaking petals
pause, then snaps the flower
from the stem, and
strides away with her prize
Author notes
I wrote this for another contest, where I had to use a bunch of rules. For instance... I had to use every letter of the alphabet, and I couldn't use past tense or adverbs. So if it seems a little 'strange', that's why. Hope you liked it!
A contest entry
- Challenge of a Madman #3 by PoeticMadnesss.
402 points, ended April 6, 8 entries
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Comments
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This is a beautiful write. The imagery was stunningly done, and the flow (though a bit choppy in places) was fairly smooth. The ending was a wonderful touch, and the entire piece was wonderfully done.
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wow... you did a great job on this...
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Wow. It's a lot better than mine. Beautiful!
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GREAT!
this was really good i read it and i loved it!
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Very nice. The way I read it, it's not a metaphor, and there is no rose. I find that interesting.
Very nice poem.
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Well written, a truly lovely piece of writing that captures the beauty of the rose and carries it away to the reader. I loved the way you ended it, excellent pace and movement. Good luck in the contest you certainly used the rules well!
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nice work with the prompt, this was an absolutely beautiful poem. you painted a picture with your words so wonderfully. keep up the great work, and best of luck in the contest.
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