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We Came Too Late, I and Rain


A flower bloomed,in sunny field,
resplendent day, a smile, a spirit;
I do not know when the dark clouds came
or how I gripped that drop of rain…

Too late, I, and rain, for flower,
neglected, unloved out in this field,
withering, expiring, drooping, down
I lift her up toward sun and star…

Peaceful, she, though fading fast,
beauty cupped in helpless hands;
seeking love, dying to be saved,
we came too late, I and rain…

In her prime, such beauty, lost,
a flower, unsung, oh, such a waste;
her soul escapes, and pulls the drop
to her quiet, pleasant face…
 
 
 
 
 
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  • Piids
    July 18
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    :')

    I have not been here for another few months and when I come back for a quick hoover over my poems; I find this. Very beautiful and I'm very moved!

    Like I said, It's a beautiful piece, but it's very possible that I am biased!


    • wbiro gold member
      July 18
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      Well, I just improved it... funny how inspiration works...

    • wbiro gold member
      July 18
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      HEY!

      • Piids
        July 18
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        HEY!!! how awesome is that? Weird universe we're living in.


        • wbiro gold member
          July 18
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          Yes... this Internet, such a new thing... I hope someone has found the 'flower' and is loving it...

  • ..with tardiness sometimes comes guilt-
    at least you made an appearance.

    nice response piece

  • This sounds like it would be a soliloquy in a play or something. It's very pretty and I like all the metaphor.

    It seems that today I'm being constantly reminded to water my plants.

    Síochán leat
    ~Mairéad~


    • wbiro gold member
      March 31
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      hey, a play, yes, I can see the scene now... talking to a skull in my hand... "To water, or not to water, that is the question..."

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