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devil child

 

He smiles at the child

encouraging her rage

the child smiles back

her furies are consumed by fire
cracking flames
her feet steady on the pavement
blue eyes gaze out
reflection of a burning building
screams echo through the night
oh what madness

they have stirred

she is caressing the black flames
strawberry curls cascade down her back
her tiny hands clenched tightly

to his sterdy grip

smell of death fills the air
she breathes it in
her dimples sneer as she smiles

looking up at her maker

he is proud

she's a fast learner

her provoked hatred peers out
possessed by the devil himself

the flames dance across her pale face
shadows of dying souls prevail
she smiles with Rosy cheeks of perfection
while the cries in desperation run mute
he has took over
consumed her
no innocence he has left
this child of satan

stares with demon eyes

as the last life willows out

bodies scattered in ashes

He bids her farewell

as she skips away into the darkness

leaving a trail of giggles

Author notes

This is about the Succubus demon child...=)

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  • vampira1665 silver member
    January 10
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    Nicely written. Children are so easily swayed. Good luck in the contest.

    vampi


  • Agrona
    September 9, 2009

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    (grins maliciously)

    Beatifully done. The last line...in my opinion...made this poem.

    "Leaving a trail of giggles"

    Brilliant, mate. Purly brilliant.

    (bows with a flourish taught to her by her dearest)

    This was wonderful.

    Best of luck to you,
    Your Czarina,
    ~Seraph

  • Xxpoison.kissesxX silver member
    July 23, 2009
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    Wow! lovely write, i enjoyed the way you wrote it, great theme, thank you for entering.


  • Catacomb
    April 15, 2009
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    I love your poetry. Such vivid, bizarre, INSANE imagery and visualizations. I love it! You create innocence and wrath in one entry, it's amazing. I am adding you to my favourites, it's rare that poems impress me this much and I cannot let it slip away. Well done.


  • aboomer silver member
    April 7, 2009

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    I like the images and emotional depth in this. It has almost a 'frenzied' feel to it - and fab. ending!!

    (the one line should read: 'he has taken over, consumed her'.....minor typo....

    nicely done
    thank you for your entry
    best wishes


  • onyx2010
    April 4, 2009

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    Best of luck to you in the contest. I completely agree the finale was so amazing, it left me with chills. Wonderfull done.


  • Dark Otter
    April 1, 2009
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    The finish!

    Was something to die for...!

    I like your dark style. Look forward to seeing more of it.


  • darkyinsoul
    March 30, 2009
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    I loved she skips away into the darkness
    leaving a trail of giggles. Deep...Great write

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