i told my self i wouldnt
forget all about you
but it seems like their is a vacum
taking all the memories away
i miss you and then when i remember
what it feels like to be next to you
i want you
i cant stand this anymore
it seems like you hate me
like you just wanted me for show
i love you
but can i tell you that i love you
will you just blow me off?
if i give you my heart
can i trust that you
that you wont destroy it,
tear it to shreds then act like i never exsisted
i want to remember everything but i cant
all i can remember is the times
that you made me cry waiting in
that cold park alone
just waiting for you to come
and be with me
A contest entry
- Round 1 Are you good enough? by DarkShard.
900 points, ended March 31, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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aww, funny a fiend of mine had a conversation with me about a similar topic today, and you have ht the nail on the head it would seem. your simple but effective language is insiringly, genuine and transparent, there is no imagery or ambiguity, ust plain and simple and for this poem I liked it, which is a feat in itself becasue i am an imagery freak. so to do what you did has changed my mind about imagery when a rawtalent shows me that imagery is just a mirage of beautiful words.
for future poems , especially the next round, which is where you going please please please lol capitalie your I's it really bugs me lol.
Thankyou very much and well done.
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