If only for a moment, I want to hide away behind closed doors.
I want to feel every inch of my body right next to yours.
If only for a moment, could everything else just fade away?
Because here in your arms is the only place where I want to lay.
I want to taste your lips. I want to feel your skin.
I want to hear you breathe. I want to let you in.
If only for a moment, could you take us to that secret place,
Where every touch and sound you make causes my heart to race?
If only for a moment, will you look deep into my eyes,
While your movements make the passion and the pleasure rise?
My lips are on your neck. Your fingers entwined in my hair.
Our breathing becomes more intense. This feeling is beyond compare.
If only for a moment, time itself seems to stand still.
Then the sparks explode into the flame of that final thrill.
If only for a moment, just hold my body tight,
As we drift back to reality from our euphoric flight.
Our breathing begins to slow. I feel like I'm spellbound.
You whisper that you love me. Perfection has been found.
If only for a moment.
A contest entry
- Round 1 Are you good enough? by DarkShard.
900 points, ended March 31, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is a great poem, very sweet and loving - I really like the way that you have crafted this in such a tasteful way, so the reader gets the feel of all the love and desire, without this becoming tacky at all
my favourite part was the ending, simple perfection and you have described it really well I enjoyed this poem!
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Oh Wow! these poems get better.
ok your in the finalist list because i think you have the basics nailed YAY spelling and grammer, you are heartfelt and genuine and it is nice to finally read a poem that is realistic in what it writes. I love your diction, your syntax and your original style, your format worked for this poem so you have a good sense of structure. I think you could go far in this compatition if given the chance.
one critique for you to think about if i may be so bold, i notice that you add words in that are not needed why say it in 5 words when you can say it in 3?
read your poems and look at every word and say does that give impact? if no change it for a better one or get rid. then say do i ned this word to make that word better? its about making descisions. see you in round 2
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