Take my flesh and paint it red,
My heart and stain it blue...
Feel the pulse beneath my neck,
Don't know it beats for you...
Yet...
Silver lines can only trace,
The faintest of tight strings...
While it drips and flows through cracks,
We make love from hollow things...
Learn my mess as I do yours,
Let mount and so shall I...
Engorge my fancy with sanguine lusts,
Enlaced as we die...
So take your pick as you dissect,
The venom of my eyes...
I'll teach you how to suture lids,
Make mess of this disguise...
Ceramic blade meet porcelain breast,
Know it thinks you sweet...
Inebriate from musk to grindings,
My painless, suffering treat...
And yet...
As the rhythm leaves the mess,
Clutched in the palms we drew...
I'll hope that ringing in your ear remains,
"How it fought to beat for you..."
Author notes
i ground my teeth through this...
but i suppose the intended is worth the bother 
(By Théo)
A contest entry
- Okay, I'm Actually Asking For Love by Run Rhen Run.
900 points, ended April 19, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i am still. still. this was written for me and you cant take that away.
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yep.. for me... i am getting this tattooed on my chest. remember when we were talking aout that? well, it WILL happen, i swears upon it. if it means anything to you, i am going to be sending you a letter probably very shortly. i love you.
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Awww Klehl. It's amazing.
You rhyme very well when you try. ^^ -
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yeah, this was explicitly for Rin's contest
first and only time i won gold...
i truly am not fond of rhyme... i just did so because i knew she'd like it.
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Amazing.
i especially like the "beats for you" parts. you did everything i asked, and put talent into it. i like the word usage, form, and your flow was quite nice as well. if i had to make any critism about this peice it would be line 13. i dont like it. it throws it off, i think you should maybe have left likes 10-14 un-rhyme, it sounded great but line 13 threw it off. ooh and the dark eerie touches you gave to it were beautiful. you took an idea and did exactly as i asked.even with your hate for rhyme. i am proud of you. this was beautiful. i really can not say much is found here that makes me tick... thank you.
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