see my son
making mistakes –
my young face
In a list
A contest entry
- HAIKU ~~~ MIRRORS AND REFLECTIONS by maa.
999 points, ended April 6, 35 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Beautiful and touching, I love this one.
Congrats on the trophy.
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claps!
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Hoodwinked!
Excellent piece that shows the way in which we can see those that follow us in our own reflection.
Perfectly penned piece here.
Congrats on the trophy
Sorry that I am late with the hoodwink!
Shari
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Gosh, am I still being hoodwinked?
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Wow, how I wish I could learn to write something as beautiful and formed as you have. How does one write these pieces. Brilliant to see the reflecton of yourself in your child's eyes but no so much when you see the same mistakes. Congratulations on your bronze
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cool...see yourself in your son...he does what you did...but now you see it from a different POV...you are a great mom, i bet...great job and congrats on the bronze...
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Thank you.
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HOODWINKED!!!
Very nice piece congrats on your trophy win for this piece best wishes always have a great week
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A wonderful, insightful poem with a a rich resonance.
Don
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Thanks Don.
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this is beautifully done.... congratulations on winning bronze...
mina
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...and I would never trade that experience for youth again either. My son is now living with me (16) and I know exactly what you mean. Down through life the earlier one learns to embrace one's mistakes the better too.
Simple and beautiful Miari, congratulations on the bronze.
Paul
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HOOD~WINKED!!!
written with a mothers heart and so very true. fantastic imagery. you are being hoodwinked by a poetic bandit. enjoy your spotlight. God bless you always
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Love, Lane
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HOODWINKED !!!
This is a clever and thoughtful senryu that transcends generational spans is a worthy reflection. Well done!
Write On!
You have been Hoodwinked by the Poetic Bandits today because WE CARE!
Dennis
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forgot the clappies
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I never noticed. Thank you.
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hoodwinked
Parents see themselves in their children. They will make mustakes. There is no getting round that. The only thing we can do is learn from them. -
You have been HOOD-WINKED by The Poetic Bandits. This is your day in the spotlight - enjoy. Love your author page - such beautiful pictures, crisp and a great way to tell about who you are. Love this poem you penned here too.
We all make mistakes as we grow up, and even when we are older. LOL Great prompt - unique way of interpretation. Have a good day!
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The day now begins to make sense, eri!
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HOODWINK
Happy to come by and be treated by your penning! 
Your poem made me smile and think how true the message is and how beautifully you wrote it.
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What an interesting interpretation of the prompt!
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Thank you.
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HOOKWINKed
Beautiful reflections of you child
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Thank you.
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HOODWINKED!
see my son
making mistakes –
my young face
This is a timeless senryu, full of the reflection of life and reflection on the next generation. Skillfully written, it is one we view quite often, but never ponder on it, as you did in this haiku.
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Profound...
enough said
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*putting it behind my ear*
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a very powerful and truly touching scenario created through only 10 syllables ! I love haiku/senryu that uses the least syllables possible, but doesn't sound incomplete ...
a very insightful realization to be able to see ourselves in others ... especially when it comes to flaws ... your senryu is like a mini spiritual lesson ...
great job, both in form and content ...
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Thank you, maa.
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Oh -- take my breath away in three lines! Wow. Lita
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Thank you.
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Parental perspectives. Touching
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It's so difficult when we see ourselves in our children making the same mistakes. Hoping to save them the trials, we give them the guidance of our experience. Unfortunately many difficult, worthwhile lessons need to be learned first hand. So, we watch them and relive an emotional fragment of our past and help them pick up the pieces.
So much in so few words.
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Oh, I like the 3-5-3! So cool, you are quite the renegade!! Wouldn't expect anything less from a Scot.
Some of my best days have been spent in St. Andrew's, Carnoustie, Troon, Edinborough and right smack dab in the middle at Gleneagles golf course.
Never been to the highlands, which I deeply regret and plan to take my son there when he is older.
My favorite is just outside Glasgow, mere minutes from Prestwick, where my wife and I sat by a river at 3:00 am with still a hint of sun in the firmament.
We drank beers and cuddled- a memory I don't deserve but will never relinquish.
Made many friends there, one in fact came to the states and married my brother-in-law.
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Thanks so much for sharing. Good piece.
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The mirror of time reflects our lost youth in our children.
Well done.
Buddy
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Absolutely -- hurts to let them fall down though.
Ace
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aww a very touching and well-written haiku. Our children's faces do make the best mirrors. Or so my parents would lead me to believe.
Best,
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I'm impressed - in just eight words you've managed to incorporate parental worry, generation gap, distribution of genetic traits, life, death and the mysteries of the universe. In short, the full mashings.
Brilliant!
Bill
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... and, I hope, convey the idea of mirror-image?
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Yep
'cept needs to be plural ...
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