Ship Called Freedom
Shedding this life,
like a snake sheds it's skin
"What will I do...Where will I begin?"
Leaving everything behind
taking only this child still unborn
going where my dreams are mine.
My man is dead; never married you see
The name widow I take, a widow I'll be.
A new life to begin, I can be me.
Out of the way from the down-cast eyes
away from the shame
A new life unfurls, I'm in the game.
Author notes
Written March 2nd, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Contest for new March members ~Come Sail Away~ by Barbara.
300 points, ended April 3, 2004, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I sense a little emotion is this write. It makes you stop and think a little. Great write, well presented and it seemed to flow pretty good. Keep up the great work.
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I adore that poem and as I read one after another I become more and more amazed with your talent.
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excellent
Excellent!! We are as (albeit female) soldiers of the world ...marching onward and taking our treasures ,our pleasures, our dignity and our being into the next battlefield...trying to preach love and respect and praying we touch someones soul...hooray for the troops ...loved this
shasta -
Wait...you're not a widow in real life, are you? My brain is scrambled and I have a hell of a lot of stuff to do tomorrow (since my cash flow didn't come in today), so I'm sorry if I'm not really concentrating on things... this is a very hopeful piece, yet complacent; the character in your story accepts her fate and moves on, even considering the horrific circumstances. That's usually not the easiest thing to do in such a situation, and it takes courage just to weigh your options. (sigh) Anyway, I hope you are feeling well. Pray for me while I am gone--I need every possible blessing I can get!
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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good
i like this one alot and it shows that there is always a new day ahead of us and that we will always have hope..... -
Wow talk about trying to get away from it all eh? Very refreshing, out with the old in with the new. Reminds me of my own experience of moving to Scotland on a whim lol
Take care and good luck
Hayley x x -
Excellent!
Powerfully written piece about the courage it takes to go on. Thanks for sharing this.
Warmly,
Richard -
Different to other entries and slightly commical Good Luck!
Lakota x -
a nice contribution to the contest...original and interesting...this was well written and I like the interpretation you chose from the picture...nice work!!...good luck!...hugs...leanne xxx
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I would imagine someone would feel this way if they were getting ready to embark on a voyage to an unknown land. So many questions to ask, with awaiting answers. You've done well!
Welcome to the site and thanks for entering
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Thanks to all who has commented on this poem. And yes Barbara..I am currenting working up an outline for a story. I will keep you informed.
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That you could see the Ship as an avenue for freedom is very appealing. A very poignant story in those short lines. A beautiful piece and thank you for entering. Good Luck and Welcome
~Von~ -
excellent
Yay you need to win the contest sisy!!
cause I think this poem is worth prize! 
beautiful and I've commented b4 
Love you always,
Lonely~ 
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You've written a captivating poem and the picture suits it well. I agree with Barbara above inthat it could be the beginning (or even the middle of) a very good story.
Good luck in the contest and welcome to allpoetry
Dee -
amazing
Excellent work you have done here. It makes me think of a couple of hundred years ago, when a woman pregnant and alone would have to pretend she was a widow. Wonderful poem. I enjoyed reading very much.
Queen
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How clever!! And touching. Reads like the 'old poets' and has such heart. This is good enough to caption the painting, I believe!!!
Thank you for sharing a wonderful poem.CookieZeal -
Great little poem about inner feelings after deciding to leave "shame" behind to start a new life. It's amazing how times have changed since then.
This feels like it could be the stepping stone to a wonderful series of poems, or a story at Storywrite. If you ever write a continuation, or second part to this, I'd be interested in reading it.
(Sorry, I missed the notification of this being entered, or else I would have been in earlier to read and comment )
Thanks for entering this
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If this is true then hats off to you! You are brave and will be alright as you are a survivor which is obvious! Good Luck and God Bless. Sincerely - S.J.
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